Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People usually adopt different strategies to become successful in their life since the meaning of success varies from person to person depeding on their characters and educational bakcgrounds. Therefore, the question whether people should try new thing and take risk or do what they know how to do well to be successful, has long been a topic of controversy among people and different circles. On the one hand there are people who adhere to the belief that people who do what they have required skill to do well are more successful since it assist them to save their time and money; on the other hand, others believe that taking risk to experience new things is the key element of every successful person in the world. As far as I am personally concerned, the latter carries further weight not only does it aid people to discover their talents and develop their skills but also does it assist people to make themselves stand out among other ordinary people.
Experiencing new things always results in learning some valuable lessons. In fact, regardless of what is this new thing, it will provide an opportunity for people to discover their talents, develop their skills and most importantly how to put them into practice so as to reach their goals. For instance, I remember I would install windows on my laptop but I have never installed yet by my self, therefore, I red some guidelines how to install the windows and finally I did it correctly. So I learned how to install windows by doing new thing which can really help me during the rest of my life. Moreover, experiencing new thing also make people versatile since they should come up with different ideas and solution in order to do the new things. In other words, people will asset situations from different perspectives which will help them to be more successful. provided people want to be successful, they should experience new things.
Doing new things help people to distinguish them selves from other ordinary people. To make clear, people can attract other's attention by doing some thing new. In fact, such new thing is a signal for others meaning that I am different from others. For instance, a secretary who does both affairs inside and outside the company is more successful than a secretary who does jsut sit on the chair answering the phone. In fact, there is a tendency for hiring people who are willing to do new things since they are more worthwhile for companies. Furthermore, there are some works which if people do it first, they will achieve great success. So the ability to take risk is very beneficial in such cases.
To wrapt it up, experiencing new things help people to be successful since not only does it help them to learn valuable lessons but also does it help them to distinguish themsleves from others. So I really attempt to experience new things in my life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...and educational bakcgrounds. Therefore, the question whether people should try new thing and take ri...
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Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...portantly how to put them into practice so as to reach their goals. For instance, I reme...
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Line 3, column 864, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Provided
...h will help them to be more successful. provided people want to be successful, they shou...
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Line 5, column 45, Rule ID: THEM_SELVES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...g new things help people to distinguish them selves from other ordinary people. To make cle...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...e can attract others attention by doing some thing new. In fact, such new thing is a signa...
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Line 5, column 582, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...Furthermore, there are some works which if people do it first, they will achieve g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in fact, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2363.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78340080972 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55717376574 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441295546559 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.1967769915 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.15 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.65 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311845388716 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114912395457 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873602703383 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202561002461 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754744787937 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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