Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As a matter of fact, finding a way toward the success has been assumed as a sought after matireal for people. In this progressive and sophisticated world, many may prefer to follow the normal accepted rules in order to achieve a goal. On the other hand some people seek for success by running constant trials and experiencing new ways. Personally, though, I prefer the second group and I feel that in our path toward goals we have to try new ideas and be risk takers. I feel this way because of two main reasons which I will explore in the following passage.
First of all, the one common and also important factor in successful people in the history is curiosity; The sense and passion of being involved with new things and new ideas in the life. The history reports bunch of important scientists, politicians, athletes, and heros who were all curios about their enviernoment. In fact we all know that curiosity is merged with trying new things and risk taking. The life of Albert Einstein, the magnifecent German physicist, is a compelling example of this principle. He had not been convinced to follow the accepted rules in the realm of physic. He tried new models and new scientific methods to establish a new cosmological perspective. Finally, his constant questioning and repeated high risk trials led him to a pioneer scientist. Had he not casted doubt upon normal laws he would not be able to ignite a fundamental revolution in modern Physics.
On the other hand, althogh many careless trials may have no significant achievement but rather a frustrated misfortune, I believe that this is the only way we have to pass. By experiencing new ideas and new things we can understand what exactly we are belong to. As a good example I would like to mention my life; When I started the medical school I was considering to be an internal medicine attending physician our town's local hospital. But this destinastion was not deemed convincing, so I started searching about new findings in medicine. I also took a serious approach to humanities; where I understood I can be a good anthropologist. Finally, I could merge two parts together and I entered the medical anthropology PhD program in which interdisciplinary researches are done.
To sum up by reasons and examples mentioned above, I feel that the only unique path through what is called success goes from experiencing new ideas and risking new things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...is progressive and sophisticated world, many may prefer to follow the normal accepted ru...
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Line 9, column 253, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...s we can understand what exactly we are belong to. As a good example I would like to m...
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Line 9, column 726, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (PhD) must be used with a third-person verb: 'programs'.
Suggestion: programs
... I entered the medical anthropology PhD program in which interdisciplinary researches a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, i feel, in fact, as a matter of fact, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8786407767 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89323646297 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555825242718 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.746908251 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.5 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173483517015 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516831263751 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050761488188 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115671408535 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375754206599 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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