Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The discussion about whether or not the working mood of successful people is a very controversial discussion. There are people on both sides of the policy who have very strong feelings. Some people feel that successful people only do the thing what they do well. But most believe that successful people always do new and unique thing and want to take risk. If I were forced to choose I would raise my voice for that successful people take risk and want to do new things. It is my firm belief that they are adventurous and risk-taking personality due to several reasons. I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, One of the reasons for my specific thought is that successful people take risk to gain experience. They want this experience for their better future carrier. It also helps them for handling the future problems. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. This reminds me of the time when I admitted in the comedy class few years ago. I have always admired comedian but never brave enough to take the stage and try myself. For my birthday, my wife paid for me to take a stand-up comedy class. I was so nervous.I went back and tried again. I still was not funny, but I lasted a couple minutes longer. The first time I took the stage I could hardly say a word. Putting myself on a stage in front of audience was terrifying, but it made me a stronger person. If I had never taken the risk, I would have still regretted it today.So. For this reason we can say that taking risk for new thing is the sign of successful
people.
Secondly, why I illustrated my specific thought is that by taking risk these people learn new things and use these things in their future task. they can solve any type of complicated situation.My personal example is a compelling illustration of this.I remember when I read in the school I wanted to join the football team. I had never much football before but I wanted to try. My father did not think I did better but he thinked that if I wante to do I could. After three month of practicing I ended up hating football. But from that training I learn a huge new thing and by using this experience I got chance in the national college football team So it is clear to see that this new experiences help me to handle this new
situation.
To sum up, in light of the above reasons, I strongly believe that successful people try new things and take risks. This is because it gives them experience and knowledge to handle new things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50322580645 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53307773872 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49247311828 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.9379067431 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5555555556 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.45110844103 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276448496992 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076750726948 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10288459033 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182924427959 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934879252366 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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