Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
As our world has become more globalized, new generations have to be even more well-educated to keep pace with innovations, as well as, to contribute to making our world a better place to live in. As we know, in this process teachers play a crucial role. I found the idea unfair that teachers would be paid according to their students' performance to improve education. I feel this way for two reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, if teachers are given money according to how well their students learn, probably teachers will demand the children to study more and more, as a result, which will bring about unnecessary pressure on students. Furthermore, they will merely focus on certain topics that are more important to pass tests. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Approximately ten years ago, when I was in the ninth grade, our school implemented this system, but this change ended up with failure. Because teachers became strict with students to make sure all of the children learned important topics nearly by heart. This is practically impossible since students have different learning abilities. Consequently, it created a more pressured, tedious, and unpleasant atmosphere inside of the class. The system benefited neither students nor teachers.
Secondly, as teachers trying hard to increase their students' grades with the hope of getting raised their salaries, they will face some hardships which they cannot alter. The effectiveness of the relationship between students and teachers is influenced by various factors, such as students' family situations, learning capabilities, personal interests, and so on. One of my classmate's experience clarifies this when this payment system was put into action in our school, she had lots of trouble catching up with the classes. She was a slow learner, and her family did not care at all to her studies. Although our teacher made a great effort to increase her scores and discussed this situation with her parents several times, it did not help any. She was not the only student with such kinds of problems if so, then imagine how would be the teachers' conditions?!
In a nutshell, I disagree with the opinion that teachers should get a salary based on their class results. This is because it will cause unneeded tension and stress between students and teachers. Additionally, some factors which affect the learning process negatively cannotbe changed despite many efforts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, i feel, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17037037037 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77598954786 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585185185185 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.9192781508 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.7 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230175088628 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680818751029 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684243741957 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150330153046 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222993142515 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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