Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young
children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
No one can deny that are negative aspects of advertising directed toward young children. Especially age two to five. I would definitely agree that young children should not expose advertising. Children who expose such advertisement could be shown negative effects. What kind of effect are we talk about you will find out next paragraphs.
First and foremost reason is that when a child expose advertisement, they feel incomplete. Let me elaborate this statement. For example, child see advertisement about a favorite cartoon movies character's toy and want to have it toy. Then child tell his parents to wanting the toy. If parents buy it, It cause in child minds that every thing I want must be happened. If parents not buy it, child thinks that his parents don’t like him and feel alone. This feeling cause the idea of incompleteness. Child thinks there was some thing wrong with himself otherwise their parents love him like normal parents.
Secondly, child brain do not process advertisement like adults. When an adult saw an advertisement, adult brain think make decision logically because adult brain fully develop. However, child brain not fully develop which means child do not make decision by logically, but they do by feelings. Thus child do things not supposed to do. When I was a child, I remember that an advertisement about cars. Moment of seeing the advertisement, I decided being a car racer and I tried to drive a car. I did not know back then how this action dangerous it was.
Thirdly, destruction of trust of child. When a child saw an advertisement, child want to believed it. This behavior could be devastating child trust. Especially when advertisement do not represent real product, child tent to trust no one. For instance, child saw an advertisement about a toy. When the toy get to hand of child if toy don’t look like that of in advertisement, child feel betrayal his trust, and don’t want to trust anyone.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, advertising directly to young children should not be allowed. It effect the children badly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'toys'?
Suggestion: toys
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Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
... wanting the toy. If parents buy it, It cause in child minds that every thing I want ...
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Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
... incompleteness. Child thinks there was some thing wrong with himself otherwise their pare...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... by logically, but they do by feelings. Thus child do things not supposed to do. Whe...
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Message: Did you mean 'effects'?
Suggestion: effects
...oung children should not be allowed. It effect the children badly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96275071633 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82004909663 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530085959885 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6689859026 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.8571428571 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4642857143 20.6045352989 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10714285714 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185834158538 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633619279262 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750817417136 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149731994243 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121654698554 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.6 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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