Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
Owing to the vital role of television, media, press and radio our personal and professional lives, side-effects of their advertisements have always been a contentious issue. Some people subscribe to the view that we should allow our infants to watch them. However, some others take the opposite viewpoint. I, personally, assert that the former opinion seems to be more logical. In the ensuing essay, my viewpoint will be elaborated.
As the first and paramount reason, based on the claims of official members, all contents of advertisements are censors by government to make sure about not having any devastating toll on the audience, especially children. Based on this issue, advertisements cannot make a bad impression on our children, indeed, this issue, imposing a strict censorship on broadcast and advertisement by government, set our mind at ease about harmful effects and influences of advertisements. Accordingly, I feel strongly that advertisements not only have not any bad effects on our children but also it can be useful for them. All that we should know is that these advertisements are not harmful to children. My cousin, for instance, works as a journalist in one of our country's press. he always asserts that we have strict policy to control the content of our broadcasts. He says that before broadcasting any program in presses, many experiments are devised to evaluate the side-effects of that program. Based on his claim, we can feel free about allowing children to follow their favorite program because the age-appropriateness of broadcasts are examined by experts.
The second conspicuous reason, which is worth mentioning is that scientists believe that advertisements and programs can become our children creative. Accordingly, when a juvenile is following his or her favorite advertisement, that program shape his or her unconsciousness and make it strong enough to apply that knowledge in her or his real life. Indeed, I am of the belief that this program can convey a variety of knowledge to the audience and by grasping this knowledge and applying in real life, audiences can surmount their predicaments effectively and efficiently. Indeed, encountering any hardship or problem in our lives, we search in our mind to find a creative solution for it. During my sophomore, for instance, I participated in a special examination. I can remember that I have to pass that exam. After quick thinking and using a trick that I had learned in my favorite broadcast, I solved the hardest problem and passed that exam. That exam was a matter of life and death for me. had i not seen that broadcast, I would not solve that problem in the exam and have spoilt my future.to put it in a more vivid picture, the more advertising children watch, the more likelihood of having a creative mind they will have. Hence, these programs can shape our mind to have a more creative one.
To summarize, considering the foregoing points and illustrations, I’m of the opinion that we should allow children to follow their favorite broadcast. Because the contents of them are not devastating and are censored by experts. In addition, they give children the opportunity to have a creative mind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 771, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ournalist in one of our countrys press. he always asserts that we have strict poli...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, for instance, i feel, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2676.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10687022901 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1103217132 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477099236641 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 831.6 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6428781069 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.923076923 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1538461538 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116671124938 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367337886117 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438593215736 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893785088292 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358072714725 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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