People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, No one can deny the vital role of education and especially academic education on our private lives. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is the main purpose of attendants for studying and attaining universities. I strongly believe that peoples attend universities and any academics environment for two fundamental reasons. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to my mind is that people register in universities to experience a new environment. The new milieu can help them to learn , making various friends, having many funny times and… .Human being, by nature, are apt to be in any environment for learning. We should take this instinctive tendency into consideration. I mean, in this part, learning can impact our decision to attend university as a much deeper depth than other factors such as having fun and making friend. My own experience demonstrates this reality. When I decided to enroll in university, my main aim was to learn much in my major even though, I was willing to see new people and communicate with them. It should be noted that the results of an empirical investigation in Tehran university which conducted by numerous experts indicates that the only purpose of up to 50 percentage of people who attend in universities is just learning and nothing more. As a result, the most important motivations of people who attend universities can be learning, making friend and having a fun times
Another equally important reason that is coming to my mind is people tend to be in universities to become prepared for their future occupation. It is a well-known fact that being independent is a desire for many young people. Being completely independence not only can make us feel better but also can lead us to have a better relationships. It is reasonable that people future gobs and amount of their revenue preoccupy them. Because without having a suitable job with sufficient amount of income no one can marry and have a family. I can remember when I was a bachelor, I always thought about this matter and finally I decided to attend university to earn a degree in a special major and become a qualified person. Without my degree that I have got from university, I would not have married and not have been independence.
To summarize, considering the foregoing points and illustrations, I firmly believe that people are willing to be in academic environments. In this way, initially, they would like to learn as more as possible and become familiar with other persons and their cultures and spend their times with them. Besides that, we cannot deny the tendency of every people to have better job and more income. This can be a vital factor when we want to examine people’s purpose to attend universities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, regarding, so, well, as to, i mean, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97027600849 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95274155154 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496815286624 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6874860475 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.409090909 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36363636364 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206292626999 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669375514047 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682959988952 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135366936785 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413553490349 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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