Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays computers and all the matter related to computer play the key role in people's lives. No one can deny the influence of technology on our daily lives because b means of computer we can accomplish multitudes of task in just a minute. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issue is the role of computer games and the effects of them on our life and our juveniles. Some people may hold this viewpoint that it is better to let children to play with their computers and play station consoles. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it can be harmful and we have to ban them to access their computers for playing. I personally assert that the former opinion seems to be more logical. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that this kind of playing can lead our children to be more creative. Furthermore, as these children will be the next generation in our society, this creativeness can prosper our future. When a juvenile play by computer, of course, he encounters with a plenty of predicaments related to that game and he attempts to solve them as soon as possible. By facing various kind of hardship and question during a short-timed game, the mind of that child sense to be more powerful always. An empirical study in Asia has conducted to evaluate the effect of computer games on children. Its astounding’s results revealed that children who spend one to two hours per day challenging with virtual games are more intellectual to comparison with others. This clarifies the fact that we cannot ignore the beneficial advantages of this game on our children and we had better let them to play at least 1 hour.
Another equally important reason is that having some recreation during the day can be useful to the health of our mind. Constant Challenging during the day without any break can face us many kinds of neurotic disorders. Just like anything in the universe, our mind need to rest and put a side some challenging activities. Therefore, in order to have a healthy mind and spirit, our children need to lay aside their homework and play a game with their computer. I do believe in this issue because I have experienced it when I was studying in primary school. I remember that when I was twelve-year old, I decided to metamorphose my study plan but after a while, I caught s serious mental disorder. When I approached a doctor, he indicated that u ought not to study all the day. You should reschedule and go on. My father purchased a computer for me and I began play with it. I can’t remember when precisely, but I can remember I got rid of that disorder totally after four weeks. Therefor I do recommend these games for children who don’t seem to be cheerful.
To summarize, it is my deep belief that computer games have grate advantages and its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. As I mentioned in two previous paragraphs, computer games not only help our children to be creative, but also the can make them a happier person. As this subject is a controversial one, we have to reach to a consensus for own sake.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 517, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...of that child sense to be more powerful always. An empirical study in Asia has conduc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, while, at least, kind of, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2606.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 556.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68705035971 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79465846501 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492805755396 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 826.2 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0495587193 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0714285714 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92857142857 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247122951317 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070669200214 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547666037732 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160304287197 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423027846265 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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