If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Quality and quantity of facilities, amenities and legislations of our hometown can determine the quality of our personal life. Sometimes we had better to change our policy surrounding an especial issue. Although there are many issues that may need some changes, but I do believe that changing in laws and legislations to prevent corruptions can influence our urban life as a much deeper depth than change in other factors such as construction a special center or anything else which may some people believe in. in the ensuing essay, I will elaborate my viewpoint.
As the first reason, I firmly believe corruptions can lead our economic level to a catastrophic stage. As everyone knows, economic level is the main characteristic of any society and the rate of inflation determine our subsistence level and the future of our occupation. We can’t expect a flourishing society without an acceptable economic situation. I, personally, have experienced the change in lows against corruptions. When I was living in Tehran, another metropolis of my country, the internal policy of our hometown was changed. After a while, a newspaper revealed some information that asserted our mayor take bribes from another institution. In that article, the journalist claimed that this the new policy corner the mayor and without that corrected piece of legislation, we would not have understood this corruption and not have arrested the mayor.
The second reason that is coming to me is that by correcting the lows surrounding the corruption and stiffen it, we can be sure that there is at least a suitable career for any educated person. As many of us know, many people around the world are suffering from the huge rate of unemployment in their countries. That I feel strongly that lack of occupation results from huge quantity of corruptions. I have recently read an article that stated that there is many various kind of career in Tehran for an educated person while there is almost no occupation for an educated person in Shiras (another metropolis of Iran). Based on the explanation of that article this difference has stemmed from their noticeable different policy about corruptions (stricter legislations against corruption in Tehran). So as a citizen, I would rather live in Tehran than Shiraz because I am unemployed in spite of having degree from the best university of Iran.
In conclusion, considering the foregoing points and illustrations, I believe that the legislations surrounding corruptions should be changed in my hometown. In this way, we will experience the better subsistence level in our society and of course with more successful members. Besides that, exactness in lows against corruption can warranty being a suitable career for everyone.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, at least, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, of course, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20720720721 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97269313452 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513513513514 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7240320139 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.6 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0680683333855 0.236089414692 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0230051828525 0.076458572812 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278045571377 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.046806537735 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185513219132 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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