Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people want to figure out which way can reach them to success. One of them is hard working. A group of people belives that they should work quickly and risk, and another group thinks they must work without or much less mistakes even it belongs with slow rate. My viewpoint in near to the first argument that states working instantly is important even though makes more mistakes. So, the followingscomes up with reasons for this agreement by giving examples.
Firstly, people can get more experience with working quickly, and consequently, trying more ways beside the mistakes detects the correct ways. For example, when I was a student in the university, I needed to prepare a few of simulation results about electronic circuits design for my thesis. But, the problem was that I could not use a simulator which was in the lab. So, I decided to try many ways to find out how I can simulate my circuits schematics on it. After two months, my simulation figures hade been prepared and I could defend from my thesis. This was not achieved unless working quickly and trying many ways to find the correct one. By then, other students, who had entered the university one year after me, were request ing help from me to learn them how the simulator works. So, not only hard working and risk causes sufficent experience, but it can also bring about financial sources by sharing the experience with others.
Secondly, people will be successful if they try more ways by working fastly and taking risk. But, if they try just one circumstance, there would not be any guarrantee for its positive results. For instance, my brother wanted to work on Machinary Manufacturer two years ago when he graduated from the university. He had just concentrated to work on that factory, and because of that, he prepared his resume like which one the factory wanted. So, he did not prepare any other resume for other factories because he believed that the managers of company would employ him surely. But, after 25 days, the managers rejected his request for job and hired another one instead of him. Therefore, if he requested more companies for the job, he would probably become hired in one of them.
All in all, not only does working quickly and taking more risks bring about sufficient experience for people, but also it probably guarrantee the result. Therefore, I suggest to people to try many ways quickly rather than one way slowly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun mistakes is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...p thinks they must work without or much less mistakes even it belongs with slow rate...
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Line 3, column 721, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...tered the university one year after me, were request ing help from me to learn them ...
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Line 3, column 738, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (ing) must be used with a third-person verb: 'helps'.
Suggestion: helps
...ity one year after me, were request ing help from me to learn them how the simulator...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2017.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82535885167 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51545098285 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521531100478 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.9620681069 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6818181818 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15231022589 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492874589752 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563624188737 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110599229667 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047240164359 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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