Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Some people just attend colleges and universities to study for gaining mark and getting certificate, so sports and social activities are not as crucial as libraries and classes for them. In this case, they unwilling for equal financial support. Others, go to universities and colleges not just for getting certificate. They go there to learn new things and improve their abilities too. So, sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries for them. Also, if universities want to give financial support for sports and social activities, they will become satisfied and happy. I do agree with the second group of students because I think we can find our talent with sports, and we can learn useful things with social activities.
First of all, I want to talk about sport. In my view, sport is really crucial and useful for everyone because of some reasons that I will mention two of them. Firstly, sport causes you get energy and become patient. So, if students spend a part of their time in sport, they will get energy, so as we know energy is the most important parameter for studying because it causes we can concentrate very well, so learning subjects get easy for us. For instance, when I was a university student, I had a chemistry class three times a week. Unfortunately, that class was formed at 3:00 P.M. So, at that time I did not have enough energy to have concentration because I felt asleep. At first, that class was really boring for me, and I could not tolerate but, next semester when our sport class started, I went there before my chemistry class. You cannot believe it, but I was strongly energetic. So, whenever I sat in the class, everything was changed for me because I could learn chemistry and enjoyed too. In addition, sport encourage students to have a healthy competition with each other, and improve their abilities. In this situation, students can make new friends from different sports groups and have fun with them, and help each other, and effort to become win. When I was a student, I participate in a match. I did not get a first rank because my rival was extremely powerful. Surprisingly, we have been friends since then and I have learned a lot of things from him. She is really professional and talented. Sometimes we practice with each other, and she helps me to become succeed.
Second, social activities have some positive impact on society because of some reasons that I want to mention. If I want to write based on my view, I can say social activities is the best experience which I have had in my life. Actually, my life has changed since I participate in this activities. First of all, I become responsible about people who live in the world, and nature. Before this activity, I did not care about illness people who are poverty, but now it is really crucial for me, and I effort to help them. I have created a website to find donner or rich people that can pay money for them. This activity makes me happy and give me a good feeling. Besides, nowadays I become care about the nature. sometimes I become volunteer to collect trash which was thrown in the nature, and encourage people to try not to throw their garbage, and I think it is really effective. For example, last month, when my friends and I went to the beach to sunbathing, they did not pay attention to the nature, and threw they rubbish, but when I talked with them after a while, they tried to collect that trash. In my opinion, these activities are essential for everyone because aspect people with necessary point of view about life.
As a result, I do agree with sport and social activities because of reasons which I mentioned, and I think all colleges and universities should dedicate a part of budget to support. Sport can improve our abilities and our talented. Moreover can get a high energy to students. Also, social activities can change our life in a positive and useful way. I suggest my friends to participate in these activities. If I were in charge, I would force students to attend in sport and social activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 282, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...life has changed since I participate in this activities. First of all, I become resp...
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Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ty, I did not care about illness people who are poverty, but now it is really crucial f...
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Line 7, column 712, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Sometimes
...owadays I become care about the nature. sometimes I become volunteer to collect trash whi...
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Line 8, column 233, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...improve our abilities and our talented. Moreover can get a high energy to students. Also...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, really, second, so, then, well, while, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 45.0 13.8261648746 325% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 106.0 43.0788530466 246% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3530.0 1977.66487455 178% => OK
No of words: 747.0 407.700716846 183% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72556894244 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22793465313 4.48103885553 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62579837548 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.388219544846 0.524837075471 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1112.4 618.680645161 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 27.0 9.59856630824 281% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 15.0 1.86738351254 803% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 42.0 20.6003584229 204% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3751718617 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0476190476 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7857142857 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 33.0 11.8709677419 278% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320204463186 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840033810322 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127275186946 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298913901779 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199354343294 0.0645574589148 309% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.89 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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