Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Universities and colleges focus their budgets on different aspects, providing students with a better environment to learn and to grow. Some people suggest that classes and libraries deserve more money than other aspects since the main purpose for most students to attend college or university is to be educated. However, I think this is a misunderstanding. Education does not only happen in classes and libraries, and it also happens when students play sports or attend social activities. Therefore, it would be rigid to say that classes and libraries are more important or they deserve more funds.
Students can increase their knowledge of certain careers in classes, and they also learn a great deal about how to study all by themselves in libraries. College students take specialized courses and prepare themselves for the competitive job market because they know that having special skills can help them gain the upper hand while hunting for jobs. They listen to professors, do experiments, and prepare for exams and papers, so they will get relatively skilful and knowledgeable for specific jobs when they graduate. That is one of the most common reasons for students to go to college. Also, since students cannot be easily satisfied with what their professors teach in classes and professors are not always available to answer their questions, libraries become places where students go most frequently for references. Students can read books about a wide range of topics and broaden their horizons. Without additional information that students acquire by reading in libraries, they can never be fully prepared for challenges ahead.
Playing sports teaches students lessons about how to cooperate, and social activities improve their social skills. Cooperation is now needed everywhere and one of the best ways to learn about it is to play sports. Students who play sports more often will be more likely to know about the importance of respect and tolerance, and they will also be good at dominating a sentiment. Playing sports makes people less selfish by showing them the negative effects that selfishness can cause, and it also teaches people how to communicate with others efficiently because wasting time often means the loss of the game. In addition, other skills that interpersonal communication requires will be trained when students get involved in social activities. Club activities provide students with opportunities to expose themselves to people of different races and backgrounds, teaching them about how to start a conversation friendly and how to end one politely. Without such lessons, students are unlikely to survive the competition after graduation.
Students become professionally knowledgeable and skilful by taking classes and studying in libraries; they also grow socially experienced and prepared by playing sports and attending social activities. Both aspects deserve equal attention as well as equal funds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e important or they deserve more funds. Students can increase their knowledge of...
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...be fully prepared for challenges ahead. Playing sports teaches students lessons ...
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...rvive the competition after graduation. Students become professionally knowledge...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to equal'
Suggestion: to equal
...social activities. Both aspects deserve equal attention as well as equal funds.
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...s. Both aspects deserve equal attention as well as equal funds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42483660131 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85603714652 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9508468659 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.571428571 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120748400001 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414380843412 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394977680197 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967259085242 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439043895983 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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