Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
studying in universities one of the important periods in our life. it is important because prepare a young student who supposed to attend in a job environment. some people believe that universities should focus on classes and affairs that related to the this like library. others disagree. in my view, other activity like exercise and social should be considered as equally important due to a couple of reasons.
First, sport plays a pivotal role in the health of the student. If a student does not have enough exercise activity, they get obese and it can cause a lot of disease like high blood pressure, heart tracker, diabetes and other.when I was a student, I was a member of futsal team and that stand to reason that now I have a healthy body. In contrast, I remember some of my friends who only focus on their classes and activity that related to classes like a library, now, unfortunately, have a wide range of disease. In addition, a sport made your body be in the great posture that helps you to have a good relationship and be an attractive person. Observation of this impact on the body and social life taught me that the university should consider marginal activity like the sport as much as classes.
second, social skill is important in constitute future job life. students without having enough social skill can not acquisition job opportunity and even if they find a job would not improve in their job. I remember when I was a student there was a lot of social activity like a job fair, science conference, donating community, a religious group that some student participate in them and others do not. when I comparison between this two group I realise that there is a substantial difference between them. the people who did not participate in these activities even if they have more knowledge could not present their potential and otherwise, the people who participate in this activity although have a lesser skill because of their social skill can present themselves better an achieve better opportunity in their life. according to my experience due to the one of the most important mission of a university in preparing students for future they should notice to social activity as much as classes.
To sum up, a university should notice to sports and social activity as much as classes because these items will determine the level of health and success of a student in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, in addition, in contrast, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80434782609 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72218792978 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454106280193 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.8280054889 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.3125 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188651517229 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722738116207 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545733278049 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143200613087 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334571643515 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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