Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Both libraries and sports division are very important part of the university but library is very essentials place for any student rather than sport. Off course, sport is good for health of the students but generally health can be maintained by the simple exercise and activities whereas library must be well equipped and fully facilitated for good education. Here I will explain why university should provide more money to library than that for sports.
Firstly, every year courses of university changes so more books, computers, bookracks, and other materials are essentials in library. To attract more students, library must be spacious and well furnished. For example, if there are not sufficient table students cannot study well. There must be many more books of academic as well as extra curriculum for students, which can be maintain if university paid more money for library. While I studied in the university there were so many students who had no sufficient money used to stay in library for more than 8 hours in library. Everyone can benefit by the library if it is with fully equipped. Whereas only few students in the universities are interested in sports as must of pupil come to achieve higher grade and good academic certificates in the university.
Secondly, University can expand library in many ways for the benefits of the students. For example, in our university canteen and library is about five hundred meter far. If a coffee maker machine is facilitated within library premises, students’ time will be saved. In library, computer can be added, internet can be made more fast if some fund is increased. One may say sports materials can be added, which is also good idea but if anyone want to do good at sports can joins the separate sports academy which are providing training and techniques.
After coaxing and boxing above statements, I concluded that there are so many benefits of funding in library rather than funding in sports by any university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 43.0788530466 16% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06079027356 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68395425852 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51367781155 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8161999151 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0625 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126643206893 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523754423138 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317933087757 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806537615153 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372157692668 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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