Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries.
It is a truth universally acknowledged that university, a stage that connects high school and work life, provides expertness to teenagers, and shapes students' character, is of great significance to the personal development of adolescents. Students, as the future pillars of society, should not only achieve good academic results, but also build up a healthy body. Therefore, educational institutions have to finance sports activities not less than library.
First and foremost, sports help teenagers to relieve stress. As the competition in job markets become increasingly intense, adolescents need to attain top grades and countless certificates to get a decent job. They are facing overwhelming pressure. Doing excercise allows them to temperately escape from their busy schedule. When doing excercise, the brain releases endorphin, which gives people a sense of relaxation. For instance, my friend Jack has a heavy agenda full of presentations, research papers and essays. However, no matter how busy he is, he always runs for at least half an hour everyday. Jack says it helps him to recharge his batteries and release his pressure, so that he can have better performance.
Furthermore, group sports, such as volleyball, football, and basketball, develop adolescents' communication skills. Communication ability is of great importance to teenager. Nowadays,most of the business require teamwork. Therefore, the capability of cooperating with teammates is essential in students' life. Being a member of a team can train their capacity of collaborating with others. For instance, being a member of basketball team, I have learnt how to collaborate with my teammates. I understand every players' strength and weakness and always make the best decision on the court. After several years of basketball training, I find that I have never been in trouble of communicate with my groupmates when doing group projects. Using what I have learnt on the court, I can always quickly apprehend my groupmates' needs and help them out. In contrast, if a person always spend his or her time on books and do not interact with others, he or she will lack social technique and becomes a nerd.
To conclude, I think the university should spend equally on sports and library. This way, students will become socially adept and less stressful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e always runs for at least half an hour everyday. Jack says it helps him to recharge his...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , most
...f great importance to teenager. Nowadays,most of the business require teamwork. There...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'players'' or 'player's'?
Suggestion: players'; player's
...e with my teammates. I understand every players strength and weakness and always make t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, at least, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35245901639 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06872810453 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642076502732 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9600584227 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1739130435 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9130434783 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127605584828 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328595475685 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438402988383 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885101568322 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467748841519 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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