Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is a truth universally acknowledged that technological advancement, such as the invention of computers, internet, and cell phone, is indispensable in our lives, contributing great deal to the contemporary society. This, too, has a profound impact in the field of education. Some people may argue that this improvement is of negative influence on children because students are distracted by the devices, making them hardly concentrate on their study. Others, in contrast, suggest that these devices can help teenagers to learn. I personally agree with the latter opinion, and I will delve into the reasons behind it.
First and foremost, with the access to the internet, children are able to view the countless learning materials. They can know the latest news in the world, get tutorial classes from online tutors, and search data for their studies. Under the exposure to these information, students can develop a more in-depth understanding towards the concepts in their textbooks. On the other hand, it is a totally different picture without the advance technology. People can rarely obtain knowledge outside the books. My grandfather, for instance, once told me that when he was a student, he could only learn from a book that passed from his father, which was torn and outdated. He was sometimes envy to the current generation as they could acquire all the knowledge.
Furthermore, technological inventions, which stimulate various type of entertainment, including online games, video, and social networking allows people to relieve stress. Because of the heavy schoolwork, such as tests, presentation, research paper, and homework, teenagers are facing overwhelming pressure. Research shows that if adolescents are overstretched, their academic performance will decline because they cannot handle the massive works. Online entertainment can help them out. Adolescents can restore their power through online leisure. For example, I always play video games for half an hour every day to relax. This way, I can temporary forget my homework. This help me to focus better and therefore increase my efficiency when I learn.
Admittedly, teenagers, who are often not mature enough and lack of self-control, may digress by the dazzling online world. Many parents are worrying that children will be addicted and thus cause a decline in their academic results. However, this problem can be solve by restricting the time they spend on technological devices.
In short, all the evidence and examples lead to the conclusion that technological facilities have a positive impact on education, as long as children use them for an adequate time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...or their studies. Under the exposure to these information, students can develop a more in-depth u...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'envied'.
Suggestion: envied
...was torn and outdated. He was sometimes envy to the current generation as they could...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd on technological devices. In short, all the evidence and examples lead to th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in contrast, in short, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40435835351 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98536709233 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612590799031 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4562966669 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2083333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13912858401 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334985529007 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279192041228 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732896679083 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00635810279663 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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