Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
Most people agree that luck is a great impact on their lives and if they do not succeed in their lives, it is because of lack of luck. Personally, however, I believe that luck has not significant impact on our lives and the only thing that matter is hardworking. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the relation between being successful person and learning how to manage mistakes are very crucial. In many cases, people should first learn how to respond to their failures, and then they will be in the way of the success. In fact, in our life, we make many mistakes and there is no way to defend ourselves against them. Instead, it is better if we learn how to cope with these mistakes and failures, and then we have this ability to succeed. My experience is a complling example of this. Five years ago, I had a shopping business in the down town of my city. I had various serious problems such as financial and management problems. In that time, I did not have a good insight into how I can manage my problems. So, I prefered to quit that business, but a friend of mine helped me to fix all of those problems and tought me to be strong and have self-confidence. Today, although my company has many new brand problems, I expand my business and grow it to be a biggest company in our town.
Furthermore, hardworking can build someone's skills and create strong experts in the community. In fact, hardworking not only affects the willness of humans but also helps them to be more productive. In the other hand, the productivity is not going to be achived easily. But, with hardworking, someone could be possible to expand his or her dreams and make them to be real. For instance, My brother and I have managed a serias of school cafeterias since 2010. He always try to improve our profits and find novel strategy to increase our royal customers. We spend much money to implement his ideas and now I believe that we succeed in this business.
To summarize, I strongly believe that hard working is the most important thing that can cause someone to be successful person. This is because of hardworking can give us insight and improve our productivity, and learning how to manage our mistakes can boost our self-confidence to continue our way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 73, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...een being successful person and learning how to manage mistakes are very crucial....
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Line 2, column 975, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... I expand my business and grow it to be a biggest company in our town. Furthermo...
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Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...school cafeterias since 2010. He always try to improve our profits and find novel s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, for instance, i feel, in fact, such as, in many cases, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65083967263 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523002421308 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0707316388 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.8181818182 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7727272727 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118343352103 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03438118945 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587165341313 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824832143524 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613006160388 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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