Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With development of society and introduction of young generation into communities, their role in this world's future seems to be so crucial. They are the compehensive force of globe which is going to make the big decisions. Some experts believe that young generation can not affect the vital decisions that shape our society generally. However, some other people think that they are going to make the future decisions right and they may be successful in performing this duty hopefully. In my view, I believe that young adults like me have the ability and the possibility to have a good and logical impact in its environment due to two main reasons.
First, young generations population is increasing rapidly these days which can alter the direction of decision making centers toward younger workers and managers. This rise can consequently out vote other groups in various areas, since they would hold the majority in important roles. For example, my friend Jim worked in a company where they tended to recriut experienced candidates who can maintain company’s current policies and carry out the assignments accuratelly. However, after a couple of years, their board's average age elevated so much that they had to replace some of the positions with younger forces. This eventually lead to a younger managerial team which now listens better to ideas of young people.
Second, the young generation is so much educated than previous generations. Academic background can assist young managers to modify their business and make them thrive, since they have new brilliant ideas and strategies which may guide our society to a more bright future. For instance, I consulted a biological company about their research and development policies which were so old that were not alligned with the companies' goals anymore. After my job, they called me and admited that young thoughts is the fact that changed the path of this enterprise and they try to use more young people in their charts.
In conclusion, depending on young people could be a challenging decision. Some may disagrees with this notion but they can be trusted to lead our planet to a better destination due to many reasons. They would be the main decision makers of the world eventually and also they know more than older generation, if we wanted to be honest with ourselves. So, it would be a good idea to prepare them for their next assignments strongly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
... to two main reasons. First, young generations population is increasing rapidly these ...
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Line 5, column 578, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...evated so much that they had to replace some of the positions with younger forces. This eve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69525045218 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1428439319 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128013142554 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459398027033 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314684732939 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873587489171 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343148734245 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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