Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web sites. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is widely accepted that new technological developments have an undeniable important role in our children’s lives. Some people believe that these advancements put so many obstacles in front of their education and made it difficult for parents to nurture their kids. However, some other people think that this statement can not be generally right about our modern society. In my view, I think young adults’ education became much more challenging today than it was before and I have two reasons to support my hypothesis.
First, education and teaching something to anyone need a considerable amount of time. But, nowadys most of the families are busy with their own issues and not paying attention to their children passionately. Similarly, young people spend most of their time inside their rooms with their computers, smart phones, gaming portals and online dating social networks. So, there is little time for families to gather around a table like old times and talk with each other about their mutual feelings and problems regularly. These occupied periods can harm them in long term life, since it develop a wrong attitude among young members of any family. For example, my friend Jim lived in house where he had an older brother whom their parents always told him that he should follow. On the other hand, his parents spent so much less period with Jim to know his issues and concerns. Thus, he never like to be his brother, because he felt that he can be a better person with understanding every experience by himself and finding it from social on line groups which damaged him the most unfortunately. So, we should admit that having time with our kids is a sensitive matter in this topic.
Second, recent technological enhancements can lead to many conflicts and difficulties in young generation's lives. Today, most of the people especially children extract a great amount of their information from internet and these networking tools which can provide them with a huge portion of misinformation ocassionally. For instance, I like to try every thing learned from internet at home. But, I did not understand that some of these might be wrong, since no one including my parents warn me about them. So, parents face a lot of difficulties in educating their kids with this growing rate of misgiuding information.
In conclusion, education is a vital part of any child which is becoming more and more concerning for parents due to a few reasons like wrong educating paths presented in social networks and limited time that they have to teach their kids about new experiences that they may have in their future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, similarly, so, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01366742597 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72157999709 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558086560364 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.038447325 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.842105263 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.31578947368 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180841104407 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544483407485 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431381499163 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116816338391 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300406898498 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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