Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The societies' structure has changed during these years, and the population of the world increasing sharply. If an event happens, there are a lot of little projects that should be done, and these projects may combine and become hard to identify which aspect belongs to which project. These reasons affect people to believe their individual decisions haven't any effect on the whole. In contrast, I firmly believe that compared to the past, our choices significantly impact society. There is a lot of reasons for this claim, which two of them that have great importance elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, this world is such a machine. If every single part works properly, the machine will work correctly. However, if a little piece has a problem, the machine cannot work at all. In this modern world, we have responsibilities to nature, our families, our neighbors, and society. If any of us do not make their responses well, the whole society face with serious problems, especially the youngers that made the basis of society's future. For example, a civil engineer decided not to pay attention to the rules and poorly built a structure. It will endanger the whole town.
Moreover, we made a lot of decisions, such as the political attitude we chose. We communicate with other people such as colleagues and friends and share our idea in social media and eventually spread out our beliefs. On the other hand, we are affected by different view and modify ours. So as an individual, we can affect many people, and over time, It causes a considerable change in a whole. For instance, there are so many revolutions that happened during these years. Because young people protest against governments and the rulers of the society, it means they have a significant effect on it.
To sum up, I think that not only young people's decisions have an effect on the whole, but also it has a more significant impact than before. In my view, society works coherently, and every part of it links to the other one, and a single belief spread quickly between the others.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...e to believe their individual decisions havent any effect on the whole. In contrast, I...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, in my view, on the whole, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85185185185 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63248171581 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566951566952 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.47872602 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.15 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.55 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14517992247 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411456619135 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462737300641 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897749375761 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190836229525 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...e to believe their individual decisions havent any effect on the whole. In contrast, I...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, in my view, on the whole, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1703.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85185185185 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63248171581 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566951566952 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.47872602 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.15 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.55 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14517992247 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411456619135 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462737300641 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897749375761 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190836229525 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.