tpo 29

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tpo 29

When students want to attend universities, most of them wish to spend their money on the right. Therefore, the quality of university matters. On the other hand, one of the essential factors for universities is how to attract potential students. So they should improve themselves over and over and present better quality for students. It is a big challenge for them to find a better way to improve. They should manage their limited money on many staffs, for example, the salaries of professors. I believe it is not a good idea to raise their wages for better quality. There are several reasons, two of which are of great importance, which are elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, no doubt that if the professors' salaries rise they have fewer financial problems so, with an open mind, they will teach better and the quality of teaching will be improved. But, the university budget is limited. The students need excellent laboratories, the newest revisions of books, dormitory conditions, and many other things to better understand. When I wanted to attend universities, I began to search which university is better in my field and asked a lot of students about their university. My questions were about the quality of the university, and they explain to me about facilities, libraries, dormitories, and other things. They told me that a good professor without good references and an excellent laboratory could not teach you in the best way and help you improve.
Moreover, the university can spend the budget on providing the possibilities for students to participate in conferences and workshops freely. It is hard for students to spend money on these workshops, but it will help them learn better and know the newest things in their field. For instance, when I was in university, I had not enough money to spend on workshops. But, I remember when I started my project. After a while, I found that if I attended the workshops before, my pace increased, and I would have fewer problems finishing my project. It becomes one of my priorities to participate in seminars at least twice a year.
To sum up, by considering all reasons mentioned above, I can't entirely agree with improving the salaries of professors to better quality. I believe they can spend money on mobilization and also help students to attend workshops. These enhance the quality of education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... workshops, but it will help them learn better and know the newest things in their fie...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...enough money to spend on workshops. But, I remember when I started my project. Af...
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Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...sidering all reasons mentioned above, I cant entirely agree with improving the salar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, at least, for example, for instance, no doubt, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.959697733 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86944331326 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48362720403 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9549841214 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6086956522 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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