Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy
eating habits.
Since the dawn of technology era, advertisement converted to a powerful way of influence in people's life; it is an influential mean to help companies achieve their goals. Sometimes advertisement aim on food, and it can be detrimental because it correlated people's health. In this regard, a controversial point often raised is whether advertisement is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. Although many people may corroborate that advertisements is the most influential cause of changes in people's diet, personally, I disagree with the statement. In the following lines, I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response.
The first reason is that sources of unhealthy foods are widespread. In other words, because of the sheer profits of food industry, restaurants are proliferating in a progressive way. Hence, everyday a new restaurant begin its work and every street teems with restaurants in any type of it, such as traditional ones or fast foods; they are easy to access for people who do not want to bother himself to prepare food. For instance, consider woman who is a full time worker, when she finishes her work at the afternoon, in her way back to home, there are a lot of restaurants. After tiredness a whole day working, it is more plausible that this tantalizing restaurants could lead her to buy and eat unhealthy food. If there were not such abundance number of restaurants, she would not propel into unhealthy foods.
The second point of equal importance is that today people have not enough time to prepare food. It goes without saying that today people should cope with many issues before they arrive home; they work long hours at their workplace and after that, they get stuck in traffic congestion. Therefore, they have a short time either to spend with their family or spend on their favorite activities. This lack of time is a motive for unhealthy food because they can achieve delicious food in a very short time. To illustrate, consider same example, If the woman could reach home without buying unhealthy food, because she should handle a lot of tasks more important than cooking, maybe she puts cooking at least priority and eventually order something from restaurants. Provided that she had time, she would prepare her food.
In summary, having analyzed the two reason above, one can surmise that advertisement are not counted as the most influential thing in unhealthy eating habits because not only are the sources of unhealthy food expand, but also people lack time to pay attention to food.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 191, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...liferating in a progressive way. Hence, everyday a new restaurant begin its work and eve...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 455, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
.... For instance, consider woman who is a full time worker, when she finishes her work at t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, at least, for instance, in summary, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04235294118 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80416299523 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545882352941 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2430263368 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.055555556 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6111111111 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134502823043 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460082099767 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708401758314 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942670739505 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097616330101 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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