Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy
eating habits.
In the modern era, people persistently seek to figure out the appropriate eating habits. Since it is not feasible for most people to put enough time on this issue, they trust every source they come across daily. The controversial question which led to heated debates among specialists is whether or not advertising influenced people’s eating habits adversely. Some people might find it irrational. I, on the contrary, believe that advertisements made eating habits unhealthy. In the following paragraphs, I will aptly elucidate my standpoint.
First and foremost, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the significant role of commercials. Whenever you are surfing the net, checking your social media, or driving on a highway, you will see advertisements everywhere. There is no way to run away from them. People tend to believe these signs, especially if they are not educated. Also, as we are living in a world in which everybody has been in a struggle to survive and earn enough money, no one has enough money to go to a nutritionist. To put it differently, the more advertisement you face, the more you believe them. There was saying that goes like this: “bad advertising doesn’t exist.” People won’t check out to see whether that sign on the highway is telling the truth or not; they will buy it.
The second remarkable point to mention is that in this contemporary world, big companies are exploring different ways to sell their products. Besides, not only will they put their advertisements everywhere, but also they will give you bearable lies to sell their products. A recent study carried out in Egypt illustrates that companies that possess a significant portion of the market’s trades tend to even lie in their commercials. This conducted research depicts that people might find it confusing to put so much effort to find suitable eating habits; therefore, they would go for the simplest ones.
To encapsulate, I cling to the idea that says advertising has a major influence on eating habits in a negative manner. All in all, that was a story in a nutshell. There are a large number of reasons supporting my opinion. I highly suggest that authorities allocate enough budget to inspect advertisements carefully.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... to heated debates among specialists is whether or not advertising influenced people's ea...
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Line 7, column 98, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative manner" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... has a major influence on eating habits in a negative manner. All in all, that was a story in a nuts...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...at was a story in a nutshell. There are a large number of reasons supporting my opinion. I highly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09164420485 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02936900985 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8168987233 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9523809524 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119161331567 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352514986498 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408616793528 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0702978159826 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246004947663 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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