If you want to get a promotion at work, which of the following measure would you take?
1. Do more extra additional jobs.
2. Participate more actively or state more personal opinions in group discussion.
In the modern era, every individual has been perpetually concerned about the ways to make more money. This concern became so vital recently, since hard work and patience appeared to be the necessities of surviving through hardships anyone may come across to each day. The controversial question which arises here is whether it is better to do more extra additional jobs in order to get a promotion or one can simply take part more actively in group discussion. Some might find it unacceptable, but I firmly believe that participating in group discussions deliberately enhances the chance of promotion exponentially. There are numerous reasons to illuminate this, two of which I will aptly elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the significant role of giving personal opinions in group discussions in the eye of management team. A recent conducted study in Germany elucidate this reason meticulously. According to this research, managers tend to hire people who don’t surrender easily in the time of troubles. They firmly announce their opinion and provide critical evidence to support that. This particular type of employee makes the whole group more active; therefore, their presence in group discussions may become indisputably beneficial. To put study’s findings differently, the more heated debates and discussions take place in a group, the more likely whole group’s progress would be. All these facts guide us to the fact that managers tend to promote active people in discussions more frequently.
The second remarkable point no one should neglect is that doing extra jobs may impact managers adversely. This is surprising though. There is an old saying which goes like this: “If you are a professional in doing a job, don’t do it for free.” It is obvious that someone who might do additional jobs, won’t do it unless it is payed enough, but the point is, if you show yourself available all the time, it may appear to anyone as you are not enough specialized. To illustrate this, let me give a personal example. Back in college I used to work as a member of scientific committee for a big company. There was a new engineer who wanted a position in the company. First it was known that he is not well educated and experimented, but after a week he was like the best engineer in the world, according to my colleagues. Later, I found that he once showed his calendar to one of superiors, and it was full of marks and signs. It is surprisingly true, it’s the matter of how much unquestionable lies can you say.
To recapitulate, I cling to the notion that says in order to get a promotion it is better to participate more in group discussions rather than work additional jobs. All in all, that was a story in a nutshell. Is it really possible for managers to measure the precise level of their employees to get promotion to people who deserve it?
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93386773547 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9487750535 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553106212425 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 789.3 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5815175582 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.583333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7916666667 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352801578232 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076865315382 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917755947788 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20837945565 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557441793013 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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