If you want to get a promotion at work, which of the following measure would you take?
1, do more extra additional jobs
2, participate more actively or state more personal opinions in group discussions.
People provide various methods to measure a promotion at work. While some people do additional tasks, others get into their work more actively or speak personal opinions in group discussion. It is so controvertible for people to decide a specific way to assess their productivity. In my view, people should be passionate about stating personal ideas and being active. They can show others their personalities, brush up on the assessment other fellows have.
To begin with, what people act as an active or social person at the workplace show others their real personalities. It is limited for other workmates to catch on nature each fellow obtain at a company. For example, my friend has started to work at a computer company in April. He has been stocking in typing anything his bosses request him on the computer at the general worktime. Even if he has the meeting, he cannot express himself in front of others who have sophisticated experience and bountiful knowledge. The reason why he acts this attitude is that there is a bunch of pressure from others. His behavior in the meeting decreases a situation to improve a promotion at work. Therefore, he should be being an active person and talk about personal comments in the discussion.
Secondly, being an enthusiastic person in the company boosts the evaluation from others. People would often criticize others as a person who is shy or who does not have an open mind if they do not talk about personal opinions. Therefore, their first impression and criteria in the company gradually worse. Take myself as an example, I had been working at a hotel when I was a freshman in university. Soon after I began to work there, I did not incline to talk with others because I was not a social person. Thus, my bosses assessed me as a person who was not passionate about working at the hotel. After I realized that my bosses saw me as the person who could not make enough communication with others, I started to change my attitude toward my part-time job more actively. After that, I had been gaining the confidence that my bosses had felt satisfied with my work.
Finally, people should be more active at work or state personal thoughts in groups discussion. I believe that they can alter personality in the working environment. Moreover, the assessment from others can look up sooner or later.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83126550868 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74115727254 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503722084367 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.175908899 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.125 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7916666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216035528655 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674083723907 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775467719287 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155014062782 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044538985075 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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