Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The university will spend money on dormitory to improve the life quality of students, which of the following do you think the best way?
-providing a room for quiet study;
-building an exercise room;
-providing entertainment place (watch film).
Each university consumes money on enhancing its dormitory for the quality of students’ life in several ways. While some universities build a room for quiet study, some establish extra exercise room. Moreover, others give students an entertainment place where they can watch films. It is so controvertible for them to decide the specific one selection. In my view, the university should provide an exercise room for their students. Therefore, they can save their time to go outside for exercise, live a healthy life, and ease their stress from school life.
To begin with, utilizing the money for the dormitory into a new exercise room gives students additional time to focus on themselves. Generally speaking, students have to go to a gym or outside to build up their muscles and run. It is a waste of time for them to consume their time on going to the gym where it is far from their housing. However, the students who obtain an exercise room in their house divide the time instead of they devote to go outside for activities into different actions such as hobbies, homework, and cooks, and so on. As a result, the university should exploit money into making a gym in dormitories for their students.
Secondly, students become healthy with a new exercise room where the university aims at improving the quality of students’ life. The majority of people sometimes come up with the idea that they want to stay inside and talk with their friends in their rooms under the situation where exercise rooms are far from their housing. Consequently, their health gradually becomes worse. Besides, at least, the risk straggled about many diseases by them will be more frequent. On the other hand, once the university creates an exercise room in dormitories, they do not concern with their health and distress about the risk of illnesses. Thus, the quality of life about students will advance by the new gym of their housing.
Finally, the university makes students decrease their stress about school life by new exercise room in their dormitory. Bountiful students regularly grab anxieties about friendships, grades of each lecture, and future life, and so on. After the university determines to build up a new exercise room in students’ hosing, they stray from their serious ideas about their life. Take myself as an example, they concerned about the relationship with my grade because it is so related to my future college. It was so stressful for me to consider my study. Hence, I started to exercise in the gym near my house to diminish my concerns. After that, my nervousness disappeared from the brain and I focused on my study little by little.
To sum up, the university should select to spend money on a new exercise room in the students’ dormitory for the value of life. I surely believe that they can earn additional time without going outside for exercise, live a more healthy life, and reduce their worries about their school life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, at least, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2458.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93574297189 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63105240064 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443775100402 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1383343157 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5384615385 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271743434667 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0991238029528 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772620283101 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187064273163 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460003386277 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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