Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for the government to spend
money on art museums and concert halls than on
recreational facilities such as swimming pools and
playgrounds.
In the modern era, allocating budgets appropriately is an arduous task for every government. Since needs and desires of citizens of a country can change steadily or gradually, authorities may come across to serious problems to equip each part of society with enough facilities. The controversial question which arises here is whether spending money on art museums and concert halls more important for government or on recreational facilities such as swimming pools. Although each of them are very crucial elements in a society, but I personally go for the second option. There are numerous reasons to support my answer, two of which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of exercising and sports. It is conspicuous that nowadays a vast majority of people suffer from different illnesses and diseases. A very common sickness emanates from people’s lifestyle. As most men and women work for long hours a day, mostly behind a computer desk, they need to get enough exercise each day. Take a personal experience as an example. Last year I worked as a member of a research group for a big company. Obviously my job was a more sedentary one, my back started to bother me from the very first days. So as I continued to work for that company, gradually my efficiency declined; therefore, I decided to put working out in a local gym into my schedule. The results were extraordinary. After three months I got a promotion and a raise in salary.
Second indisputable reason to mention is that, exercising will provide suitable time to distant from one’s job. It is essential because most of the people work in big companies which put a lot responsibility on their shoulder. In these short breaks from working, people can spend time on their own health. By this means, not only people will maintain their physical health, but also they can work more efficiently. A recent study conducted in Germany depicts this phenomenon in one sentence. People who work out in a daily basis, get promotions within a company more frequently. In this manner, I believe providing recreational facilities is a win-win choice.
To encapsulate, I cling to the idea that says governments should spend more money on recreational facilities instead of art museums. It is anticipated that, in near future, most of the big companies will endow large spaces for their employees in the company itself. In this regard, a nice rapport will form between the company and the employees.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96235294118 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89590188903 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592941176471 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3516478887 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.36 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13872834548 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336912233337 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067080913319 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.092223232297 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726267153783 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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