Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The college is a very important part of our lives. It is where we go to acquire knowledge from our professors and it is what create our professional career to the future. Some people would believe that sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support; other would disagree. In my view, I belive that classes and libraries have to be in first place for two important reasons.
The main reason is that nowadays there are more financial aid to athletes when compared with academic merit. The majority of scholarships for undergraduate students are provided to young that can play some type of sport. More focus should be given for people that have financial difficulties or came from a poor background. For example, I have a brazilian friend called Peter. Last year he went to the US to play soccer at the University of Southern California and received a full scholarship, paying all the tuitions, health care and also received a small salary for everyday expenses. Peter told me that it was a very easy process, he was invited to a match where the coach from the university was present. There were three team formed by eleven people each one and he played against the two other teams. In the end of the selection twenty five of thirty three students were selected to receive financial aid. On the other hand, I have another friend from Brazil called John and he is studying at the Stanford University. John won an international championship of math place in Japan and he explained to me that only three students received an offer of financial support. In that way, it is easier to receive some type of support play some sport than being a very smart student. This event clearly demonstrated that classes and libraries should receive equal financial support.
Another reason is that the main objective of colleges and universities is the formation of their students and not the sport. Many people use the infrastructure of a college just to increase their visibility as athletes. A lot of these people barely go to classes and this expense could be used for people that really want to get a good professional formation. For instance, last week, I watched on television a documentary about the University of Michigan. The presenter showed all the buildings, included the stadium. Also, he explained that last year the university spent almost one billion dollar to upgrade their stadium. On the other hand, he showed that the main library was constructed in the 1950s and have never passed with any reform. He presented some interesting data that the stadium's terrain was used by just fifty different students and the library was used by more than ten thousands every year. This documentary taught me classes and libraries should receive more financial aid.
In sum, tough some may belive sports and social activities need to to receive the same money as classes and libraries, on actual days we see that the second ones need more support. Not only there are more money being invested in athletes than students but also the main reason that people go to college is to study and not to play sports. Every college should try to help more their academic students because they have equal or more problems when compared with athletes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 790, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stadiums'' or 'stadium's'?
Suggestion: stadiums'; stadium's
...resented some interesting data that the stadiums terrain was used by just fifty differen...
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Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...elive sports and social activities need to to receive the same money as classes and l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, for example, for instance, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2741.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86856127886 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59418095668 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449378330373 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.0 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3725058756 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8928571429 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1071428571 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67857142857 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256405450975 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726368775945 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815934833734 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170847899061 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483604725407 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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