Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The world we are living in is changing at an ever-increasing pace as a result of human knowledge development. The influence of this rapid change on human beings’ lives is still a moot point and many specialists argue over merits and demerits of this change (Write simple and effective). Some believe that people now are less satisfied with their lives than before. Others disagree (The sentence length is relatively short.). For my money, people today are happier than the past for a couple of conspicuous reasons.
The first reason in favor of this idea is that life now is much easier than old days. Thanks to the advancement of technology, many new devices and instruments have been invented and taken the place of man in many activities (Rewrite) (Provide a clear connection between this sentence and the following ones). For example, in old days, people were deprived of water piping in their homes (People didn’t have an access to the water piping in their house. /// (“deprive”) people were deprived of their right to vote //// People were deprived of in the region because of poor financial infrastructure), and had a hard time washing their clothes. They had to carry their laundry to the nearest river and wash them using the running water which was quite cumbersome responsibility, especially in the harsh winters. Today however, washing machine does the same task with the least effort and a higher efficiency by just (the only thing people need to do is to …..) placing the clothes in the machine and pressing a single button. Such facilities of course make life much favorable.
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The next reason which cannot go unnoticed is that today the life is truly healthier than before. The development of medical devices and exploration (advent of) of new drug formulas, have brought joy to people’s lives (…. aid and abet individuals to be happier). For example, my grandfather passed away twenty years ago because of the intestine cancer. This huge loss perturbed our family for a long time (That was an unbelievable and non-compensable event that negatively affect out family). *** My friend’s dad also was diagnosed with the same kind of disease two years ago. Incredibly, doctors cured him within a few months using a newly developed drug. Now, his family is absolutely more delighted.
The last reason that brings to my mind is that life is more entertaining today. With the outbreak (???) of internet and electronic devices, everyone can experience the thrill of watching the latest movies and listening to the hottest songs using the large LED TVs at their homes. Besides, unlike old days, there are lots of discos and dance clubs in many modern cities. People can attend to these places with their family members and friends and enjoy their time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... The sentence length is relatively short.. For my money, people today are happier ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
... in their homes People didn't have an access to the water piping in their house. ///...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in their house. /// 'deprive' people were deprived of their right to v...
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Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...the only thing people need to do is to ….. placing the clothes in the machine and ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Placing
... only thing people need to do is to ….. placing the clothes in the machine and pressing...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
... medical devices and exploration advent of of new drug formulas, have brought joy to ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Aid
...e brought joy to people's lives …. aid and abet individuals to be happier. For...
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Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...d non-compensable event that negatively affect out family. *** My friend's dad also w...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Of
...tertaining today. With the outbreak ??? of internet and electronic devices, everyo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, still, for example, kind of, of course, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2321.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03470715835 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76132214499 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590021691974 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6587521717 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2692307692 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7307692308 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65384615385 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261691782277 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651153015884 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811069163018 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154642196016 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624008640926 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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