Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Due to the increase in technology, the world is changing rapidly and people in the present days are busier because of work pressure. However, a plethora of people contents that people in the past were happier but others disagree with the statement. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I personally believe that people in this era are less happy or less satisfied. I feel this way for several reasons I will expound in subsequent followings.
To commence with, people in the present days are more independent and less connected with the family members. They spend most of the time in their workplace and have spend less time with family. As a result, they are not comfortable to share problems with their family which is one of the causes of dissatisfaction. Whereas, in the past, people had enough time to enjoy with their family members and also shared problems, stresses, pressures. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I started college, I started living in dormitories. At first, I shared everything with my mother and I felt comfortable and satisfied after sharing. But, a few years later I recognized myself that I am not just like before. Then I started finding reasons and realized that this was because of my dissatisfaction to life and less connection with my mother. Therefore, I started expressing my feeling to my mother I felt so glad and cheerful.
Furthermore, the industrial revolution and technological growth is also the cause of unhappiness. Due to the rapid growth of the internet, media, social networking site makes people more depressed. For instance, one of my cousins fan of Selena Gomez who always tries to imitate her. She follows everything of her like the dress, exercise, diet chart or even makeup. But, in the end, when she realized that she does not look like her she feels regret. Another is, with the diversification of job field people can not reach their desired goal and the result is unhappiness. But, in the past field was limited and they can easily fulfil their dream.
To recapitulate, I personally believed that in present days people are more unsatisfied because of weak relationship, less job satisfaction and depression etc. whereas people in the past decade faced those problems less.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...of the time in their workplace and have spend less time with family. As a result, the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, whereas, for instance, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04909560724 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9156929334 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527131782946 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9754157276 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.4166666667 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.125 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323291855686 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832297294293 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759572897337 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191705822006 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698515762902 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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