Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any shadow of doubts, education is one the most prominent needs and trends which is embedded in people's spirit, since the dawn of humanity. Should people realize the importance of this element on the individual's life span, especially in the early stage of life, they will ponder over this question that whether emerging the up-to-date facilities turning into an obstacle in the way of children's education or not. Some people are inclined towards the idea that recently modern facilities has been negative impact on education system, while others believe that these equipment pave the way to access the precise information rather than before. I do find the idea of the former group more in accordance with that of mine. To support my stance, in the course of this essay, I will aptly substantiate my viewpoints.
To begin with, students' invaluable time is wasted by spending on unnecessary deeds in such striking stage of life and do not learn their materials better. It is crystal clear that by galloping rate of technology, modern facilities like cell phone and the internet have become the inextricable part of nowadays life. Thus, most of the school children spend high portion of their time in playing games by cell phone or even in surfing on the net, instead of studying their materials and solving more problems related to their studying materials to be sophisticated person. Moreover, the knowledge which convey by these equipment not only are impractical, but also have catastrophic effect on their mind and their learning process efficiency. Although these kinds of activities could consist of a little up-to-date information, it does not worth by comparing their negative effect.
Another reason which deserves to say some words here is that, students cannot concentrate to their studying as well as before, whereas, during the class or even in the library their complete focus are not on the teachers and their lessons. This means that, in the course of the class they are thinking about other unimportant tasks such as, the result of that video game, or which last game is available in the internet or even who could send him or her text message. According to the results of a psychological survey which is recently conducted among the school children, high percentage of the students have not been able to acquire top mark in the final exam since the advent of the cell phone, because of their lack concentration on the educational material. This survey obviously mentions that how education of students has been challenging since emerging the technology.
Finally, I think that coming up state-of-the-art facilities have taken the place of the teachers. Ergo, the emotional ties between teachers and their students are not as strong as the past time. Not past ago, when I was a student, I remember that I actually respected my teachers as my role model event more than my parent, however, it is witnessed that pupils do not listen of their teachers' advices. For instance my nephew, who is in elementary school, does not trust on his teacher and always has conflict with him.
In brief, by contemplating the aforementioned reasons, I strongly subscribe to the idea that advent of technology not only waste the majority time of the students, but also deplete their energy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...e the importance of this element on the individuals life span, especially in the early stag...
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Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...ation system, while others believe that these equipment pave the way to access the precise info...
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Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this equipment' or 'these equipments'?
Suggestion: this equipment; these equipments
...Moreover, the knowledge which convey by these equipment not only are impractical, but also have...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...their students are not as strong as the past time. Not past ago, when I was a student, I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, while, for instance, i think, in brief, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2768.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05109489051 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70913320798 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532846715328 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9706518019 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.684210526 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8421052632 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131156739724 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0401448360246 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327983972203 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668451896264 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237022027902 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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