Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having private space and respecting other's one is necessary in all time and it is no matter that who is. Although many people like that celebrities's life be visible but I do not think so. Each one has it's secrets which does not like to reveal for public, unfortunately, it is ignored nowadays especially for famous persons. I feel this way for 3 main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, being in public is unavoidable for people, attending in annular ceremonies, religious and national meetings, cinema, etc. However, eminent cannot take part in them easily. I will exemplify my point with a true story about something that happened to me. Last week, when I went to airport I had many trouble for getting my flying card because of crowded population whom wanted take a picture with a soccer player. Not only, did I loose a lot of time, but I missed my flight finally. Breaking his hand, the soccer player experienced really inconvenient situation, too.
The second point that restricts known persons is difficulty for preparing even primarily needs. For example, when I am going to buy something, I can go to shopping centers and select it freely. Consider when you are a comedian, you will disturb by many people who are there. As a result, you may limit for doing that stuffs through online or others.
Last, there are some events that really are special such as certain family news. For instance, last year, one of actors got divorce. After few hours, there was huge amount of rumor in many news papers and websites about his relations, finally, he fired from his job. I believe that this kind of news should not be broadcast. Had not that news revealed, he could have continued his occupation now.
Overall, what drives someone to claim there is no respect for personal space of famous persons may fall in to 3 main categories including limits for attending in public, doing daily tasks, and not having freedom for personal decisions and zones. I hope any person pay more attention to others's rights, especially celebrities!
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun trouble seems to be countable; consider using: 'many troubles'.
Suggestion: many troubles
...Last week, when I went to airport I had many trouble for getting my flying card because of c...
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Line 9, column 327, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...otherss rights, especially celebrities!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83615819209 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54148132516 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64406779661 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2880454084 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5238095238 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8571428571 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944088094773 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261190178743 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030251759967 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0519482356675 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217902203082 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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