tpo 10
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Supervising children's activities has a dispensable role in their future developments. Although, some parents claim that having online access to computer games entertains their kids, but I do not think so. In my view, it is not only a kind of killing time, but it also damage to their health and family's financial condition. I feel this way for 3 main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, regarding the issue of spending long time in front of computer screen, one might suggest that it is extremely detrimental for both mental and physical health of juvenile. To clarify, 5 years ago, my brother used to play "Pokemon"in every time and every where. He lost his eyesight for this play. Had not he spend much time for it, he could see world without glasses now.
Another aspect of not allowing younger addict to computer games is their worthwhile time for training. For example, when I was in high school, I enjoyed competing with my friends in several games. If I studied hard that golden years, I could have admitted in my desired major in university.
Most importantly, having considered the cost of updating and new various applications, each individual can calculate how much money he or she would lose for buying them. However, these budgets could have devoted to other more useful stuffs such as sports, music, etc. For instance, last year, not wanting damage to our family's economic, my sister collected her money for training advanced painting courses. She has her gallery now and earns sufficient amount of money each mount.
In all, what drives somebody to assert that it is not advisable to let children for doing computer games perhaps fall into 3 basic categories including existing problems such as health, money and benefit time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 269, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'damages'?
Suggestion: damages
...nly a kind of killing time, but it also damage to their health and familys financial c...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: EVERY_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'everywhere'?
Suggestion: everywhere
...ay 'Pokemon'in every time and every where. He lost his eyesight for this play. Ha...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
... his eyesight for this play. Had not he spend much time for it, he could see world wi...
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Line 13, column 481, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sufficient amount of money each mount. In all, what drives somebody to assert t...
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Line 17, column 211, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...such as health, money and benefit time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, such as, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99667774086 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70776144689 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.667774086379 0.524837075471 127% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.670239795 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.125 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155135562938 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488385657878 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544650374855 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900081263884 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395444933829 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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