Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Today the rate of unemployed educated people is growing rapidly and psychologists are undermining the issue to find a pragmatic solution to this problem. I personally agree the statement that the ability to relate well to people and coworkers is more critical than studying hard in school. In the following paragraphs I'm going the explain further about my opinion.
First reason for me to support this saying is coming from my personal experience. I've been in work environments for about 3 years now and I've dealt with various types of people and behaviors there. I've seen people coming to a job, having successful presentations at first, amazing others with their skills and level of professionalism in a specific area but they get caught between a fight with their coworkers or their boss and soon they are gone. What if they tried to create a bond and a strong relationship with their coworkers instead of focusing on presenting their skills at the first step? well I think it would have worked well for them.
Another reason that can support my point of view is a psychological fact. Many psychologists believe that most people use relationships and well contact to other people as a mean to cheer themselves up and decrease the level of stress they are experiencing. We all know that work environments in most of the cases, have the potential to increase stress and anxiety in workers due to different job situations. So people who work in the same place for a time learn to calm their selves by contacting other people most likely in the same position as they are, share their ideas, their fear of the consequences and also get advice from others to do a better job. So people with great abilities to make relationships with their coworkers have a better chance to experience success in their job.
To sum it up, however studying hard in school can improve your skills and turn you to a professional, but having the ability to contact other people in a proper way and make effective relationships is of more importance. So it is recommended to all students to work on their social skills same as their studying their school lessons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, well, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82162162162 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78457611395 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516216216216 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4745676573 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.933333333 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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