Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
In this modern world, each job has its own requirements for people who want to apply it. However, they are some standard abilities that all jobs demand from individuals to be successful in them. In my opinion, the most vital one is communication skills. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, people who can speak their mind better can also achieve more success in their occupations. That is, there are certain situations at work in which bosses want to know the best approach that their employees suggest for solving the problems. If employees were diligent students in the university, but do not know how to state their point of view, they cannot recommend reasonable solutions, so their boss will lose his faith in them. However, when the employees have great ideas and the ability to express them well and persuade their bosses, their bosses become aware of the employees' importance and significant role in the office. Therefore, managers consider promotions for them and provide a raise with the workers' salary. Consequently, the staff cannot get a raise or promotion without knowing how to state their opinions in crucial situations.
Secondly, individuals who can communicate suitably with their colleagues are more prone to be helped by them in hard situations. In other words, when people behave to their co-workers with respect and show them that they are important, their colleagues will be there for them in the majority of the problems in the office and have their back, so they can improve faster and access to their goals in less time. For example, ten years ago, my mother was a nurse at the hospital. She had three colleagues who were close to her, so whenever she had any problems at home, and she could not go to the hospital, her co-workers supported my mother and covered her shifts. As a result, If my mother had not behaved well with her co-workers, and they did not like her in the workplace, her manager would have thought that she was not a responsible nurse and might have fired her because of not being able to go to work; therefore she could not get promotion and be prosperous in her occupation.
In conclusion, I believe if people want to be successful at work, they have to learn how to interact with other people well. This is because they can express their point of view when their boss asks for it, and prove to their managers that they are right for higher job positions. Moreover, their co-workers will support them in arduous situations and help them when they need it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 588, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...osses, their bosses become aware of the employees importance and significant role in the ...
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Line 5, column 723, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...s for them and provide a raise with the workers salary. Consequently, the staff cannot ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78299776286 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53867186465 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498881431767 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0090350141 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.777777778 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8333333333 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132599213086 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521735858699 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404634064741 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0977284913836 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278526488393 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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