TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this hectic modern life, the majority of people always have financial problems and spend most of their day thinking about how they can earn more money. In my opinion, by paying more money to the university professors, the universities can enhance their education systems. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, if the universities raise their professors' salaries, they can concentrate more on their teaching. Nowadays, everyone worries about the future and whether they earn enough money and be able to spend the rest of their lives happily and in peace or not. Therefore, by providing a higher income for the professors, the universities can eliminate these concerns. Consequently, professors can only focus on how to utilize a more effective teaching method for students to prepare them better for their future job opportunities. For instance, my uncle is a university professor whose students always achieve the best careers with high social status and high incomes. When I asked him how this is feasible, he told me the only thing professors care about in that university, is the future of pupils because they do not have money concerns. Therefore, they put all of their efforts to teach the students as productive as not only the students will become successful in every job interview, but also the employers will compete with each other to hire them. For this reason, in his university, the majority of the students will achieve high paying jobs. However, if the professors were not willing to teach them, the pupils did not have the chance to overcome the labor difficulties.
Secondly, giving more salaries to professors can be an excellent way to remind them how vital they are for their society. That is, everyone in life wants to be a valuable person in their society, and they want their society to understand this fact and acclaim them. Achieving more revenue at the end of the month can act like praise for the professors. This way, the universities can encourage them to do their best and teach more efficiently. For example, back to when I asked my uncle about his pupils, I also asked him whether just a high salary is crucial for him because of the financial problems or not. He told me a high university income shows him that his boss and the society have faith in him and think that he is essential for the advancements of the country. As a result, higher revenue motivates him to work even harder and prepare the students as much as he can to improve his country.
In conclusion, I believe that raising the professors' salary can be beneficial for increasing the quality of education in universities. This is because gaining more income can remove their worries about their future social level. Moreover, it can encourage them to work harder because they will recognize that they are valuable for society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
... conclusion, I believe that raising the professors salary can be beneficial for increasing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88843813387 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65539012057 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440162271805 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4867741684 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.545454545 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4090909091 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0928354212377 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377618656005 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377002719874 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701089473962 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342230582924 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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