TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends.
In today's modern life, friendship plays a vital role in preserving people from depression. In my opinion, having long-term friendships has more impact on our stage of happiness. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, I believe when you are with a group of old friends, you feel much more comfortable. That is, close friends who have been together for several years know each other's behavior and manner. They do not need to be so polite and formal together, so they can say more jokes and have more fun, such as going to parks, watch comedy movies, etc. For example, when I was a freshman in college, I had a group of friends which we had known each other for four years, and also, I had a new friend in college. While I was with my old friends, I was so blessed, and I enjoyed their company a lot. In contrast, when I was with my new friend, the atmosphere of our friendship was not as friendly as what it was with my old friends. Therefore, I would rather spend time with them more often.
Secondly, close old friends can be more helpful when you need them in emergency times. In other words, if something urgent, such as being patient, demand for money, or talking about private problems happen, they will be there for you no matter what. In consequence, you can rely on them every time you want, so you will not be afraid of being alone, and that makes you be a happier person without anxiety. For instance, when I was a fifteen-year-old girl, my mother had breast cancer. In those days, I needed to talk to a person about my problem. My best friend was always there for me and heard my worries. If she did not help me in that tough time, I might end up having severe depression. As a result, I could deal with my issue in a little time with her suitable advises.
In conclusion, remaining as a member of the old friend's groups can make you much happier. I think this way because close friends' friendships are more pleasant and delightful, and you can depend on them more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...en together for several years know each others behavior and manner. They do not need t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42328042328 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45092363793 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534391534392 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4490369657 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.45 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214794198286 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713095733316 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379882344281 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137743604699 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263013810717 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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