Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive world government decision has significant effect on the development of a country. Since government is the representative of all the people, they are responsible through leading the decisions toward prosperity and providing better place for citizens to live. Some people believe that for better progress in society government should put more budget on the education of very young children than on universities, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, concentration money on kid's schools has a noticeable role in development of country for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that children in younger can easily be trained for having significance role in improve the society progress level. As humans have lower age, they have high level of learning capacity. Therefore, kids are more flexible and face unbiased among issues which make them inclined to gain more useful knowledge that would be have positive effect in building the country in future. For example, when I was in elementary school, my school had financial problems. As my teacher believed that the prosperity of country in future relies on new generation who are the infrastructures of society, she spent a lot of time and energy in convincing the government to allocated more budget to our school. Now, as I know each of my classmates occupy a good positions and cause several enhancements in country. As you can see, by putting more money on children education, government guarantee the future success of country.
Second, it is more economical to invest in kid's education to increase the country development. Since the brain efficiency of kids are much higher than adults, they require little supplements to learn. As a result, government could obtain better result in the rate of country progress by investing money in schools. For instance, the statistics demonstrate that younger generation has more effect on improving the society condition rather than university's students. Researchers' investigation among two groups reveals that although investing on kid's school is a long term procedure, it has more impact on society progress. Not only are students more open-minded in learning novel subjects, but they also have stronger spirit toward failures. If government had spent more money on young children education, country would progress in higher rate.
In conclusion, I do believe that the advantages of investing budget on kid’s school in progressing the country overweight the benefit of investing on universities. Not only is children easily trained, but also investing on them are economical. I think that governments should pay more attention on kid's education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 383, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...positive effect in building the country in future. For example, when I was in elementary ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3891509434 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97120391219 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518867924528 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9263452785 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.80952381 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1904761905 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228386986501 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727090921519 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598664608099 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148837034778 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595587031055 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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