Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Swaggy on Sat, 08/03/2019 - 06:55

Regarding whether governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams, different people hold divergent opinions. Some would maintain the standpoint that this statement is true because arts can improve people's appreciation ability of arts and awareness of beauty. I partly agree with their notion. However, from my point of view, I contend that government should spend more money to support athletics than to support arts.

Firstly, athletics bring glory and respect from other countries if they get good grades in Olympic Games. We all have the experience that when the athletics from our country win the first prize in an important game, it is so proud to sing the national anthem and get the gold medal. What's more, this could make the athletics from other countries all come to congratulate which is definitely a glory. Consider my own experience which can shed some light on this issue. I still remember when Sun Yang, the famous Chinese male swimmer athletics, won the gold medal in 2012 Olympic games, all the other athletics came to congratulate him and took pictures with him. Furthermore, many media reported this thing and appreciate the whole China for making such a good achievement.

Secondly, people especially young teenagers tend to imitate the athletics to spend time doing sports which will reduce the obesity rate and improve the healthy rate. As is known to all, everybody has the habit to imitate stars, so it is such a good idea for citizens to imitate famous athletics to do sports which can give a solution to the problem of higher obesity rate among young students. According to a survey conducted by WuHan university in 2017, after the famous Chinese table tennis player Zhang Jike became famous for his talented skills and handsome appearance, about 43% more young people below 18 took part in table tennis every week. What's more, the whole obesity in China reduced 8%, especially among young girls.

Admittedly, it is undeniable that governments spend more money in support of the arts can make citizens improve their arts appreciation ability, but in support of athletics can bring stronger effect like reducing obesity rate and motivating citizens to go outside and do sports.

To sum up, whereas there is an argument about the more importance for governments in support of arts, namely improving appreciation ability and awareness of beauty, bring respect and good reputation to our country, coupled with help citizens motivate to do sports makes a strong case for the more importance for governments to spend more money in supports of athletics than in support of the arts.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...national anthem and get the gold medal. Whats more, this could make the athletics fro...
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Line 5, column 650, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...8 took part in table tennis every week. Whats more, the whole obesity in China reduce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, whereas, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07674943567 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5906885804 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507900677201 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3512167432 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5625 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334449824128 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114672981875 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139657038835 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222202597915 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159033563286 0.0645574589148 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...national anthem and get the gold medal. Whats more, this could make the athletics fro...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 650, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...8 took part in table tennis every week. Whats more, the whole obesity in China reduce...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, whereas, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07674943567 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5906885804 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507900677201 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.3512167432 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5625 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334449824128 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114672981875 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139657038835 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222202597915 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159033563286 0.0645574589148 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.