Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this challenging world it is becoming complicated to obtain any perfect job. Therefore, it makes a large number of people to focus from the secure job to reach to satisfying job overtime. Personally, I prefer to get a secure job after my graduation of the university. I try to explain my position below.
To begin with, when students graduate from the university they are not too experienced with extraordinary jobs. So they must start from the fundament to be successful in the future. They can gain experience by working constant and productively. My older brother's experience is a compelling example what I mean. Three years ago when my brother graduated from master of art he was hired by a small company. At first, he received a little amount a money and he came too late home due to abundance of office works. He was optimistic to the future. Finally, this year he ended up to be hired by an international organization. Now he earns well for his living with less responsibility. This example illustrates that by gaining experience people may be successful in the future.
Secondly, without fundament in jobs it is extremely difficult to get any tremendous job until you have a rich uncle. Again, this makes job seekers to start from the beginning. A secure job is perfect for a fresher. For instance, when one of my friends defended his PhD, many powerful companies invited him to work with them with high salary and many more opportunities. In spite of all these opportunies my friend chose to begin his own company from the start. So, it was difficult for him for at least two years to be competitive with gigantic companies. Thus, he ended up to be a founder of one of the perfect companies in our country. This example demonstrates that even a insignificant job may be an extremely good job in the future if you could be constant in your goals.
Taking everything mentioned above into account, I firmly conclude that people must get a secure job at first. This is because those people are not too experienced and because they do not have a significant fundament to start with perfect job for their future prosperity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...in any perfect job. Therefore, it makes a large number of people to focus from the secure job to ...
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Line 9, column 675, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ry. This example demonstrates that even a insignificant job may be an extremely g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, for instance, i mean, in spite of, to begin with, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78167115903 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89091066069 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522911051213 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4188226653 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.9166666667 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4583333333 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26152197509 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762558163266 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634549336612 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177531745041 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587201002269 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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