Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you thing is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It is very challenging time for young adults to live in this changing world. Some young adults prefer to live alone while others want to live with their families. In my opinion, it is better for young adults to live with their parents. I feel this way for two important reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is very difficult to evaluate the experience of young people and older people in general. Because older people are always more experienced over young people and they challenged many difficulties during their live. My older brother's experience is a compelling example what I mean. Two years ago my older brother left our home in order to live alone independently. Having lived about three months in his small room in the city center, he returned back to our home desperately. He told me that, it was extremely complicated for him to live apart from our family because he is not enough experienced. This example tells that experience plays very major role in the development of young adults.
Secondly, the life is becoming complicated due to economic situation that many young adults cannot earn enough money for their living. Most of young people chose to stay with their family until they find a good source of income. For instance, as a young person now I live with my parents who help me with my financial issues. Nowadays, renting any rooms to live independently cost really high. That's why, I prefer to stay with my family in order not to suffer from finances. By doing so, I have many opportunities to pay close attention to my studies. This example also tells that young people should stay with their parents who can help them with money.
Taking everything mentioned above into account, I firmly conclude that it is better for young adults to live with their parents. This is because older people are more experienced and they could provide younger generations with finances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'returned'.
Suggestion: returned
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Line 9, column 137, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the young') or simply say ''Most young''.
Suggestion: Most of the young; Most young
...not earn enough money for their living. Most of young people chose to stay with their family ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...to live independently cost really high. Thats why, I prefer to stay with my family in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, second, secondly, so, while, apart from, for instance, i feel, i mean, in general, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84939759036 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51266208442 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524096385542 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.2103933658 48.9658058833 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368295205887 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125131428601 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103932565784 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253019482505 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105686766422 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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