Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
jobs are a vital part of our life. These days in lively societies, all people should find good job to cover their expense throughout lifetime. some people believe that individuals should take a secure job that would be satisfying instead of right away without thinking, however others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, taking a job right away is better than satisfying if everybody have opportunity to get it for two noticeable reasons.
first, if people do not take a secure job right away, they may lose this opportunity. Nowadays, increasing population, especially educated persons, cause to rise demand to get job significantly. if everyone hesitate which job choice is better, they really miss it and even can not find another job. For example, when my cousin, who had strange characteristic when he was so young, was 17 years old, he decided to get ride of school. At first, his aunt recommended him to choise work at shoe company where launched newly. however, he did not believe opportunity job was good because he liked work independently instead of worker. Unfortunately, other people could get this jobs right away. As over time, my cousin became depress due to the fact he not only lost good job but also could not find satisfying job, which he wanted. As you can see, people should take a job right away if they do not want to miss it.
Seconds, taking right away job cause people to save their time to become expertise in one job instead of searching satisfying occupation. In youth time, everyone should try to avoid wasting their time and select job quickly if they want to become rich. some individuals erratics change their career in order to find ideal job that lead to lose the best time for progressing. Therefore, people should follow first opportunity to get more money. For instance, when my cousin again lost excellent job in his life span, he tried several jobs for long years. Although he successes almost in some of them, he could not get more experience in one special job and waste his time. After goes years, he worked part-time job in order to afford all his expenses. however, his sister conformed mechanic engineering from childhood and attained tons of experience and progressed financially. this experience taught me that if anyone want to become more expertise, they should select job right away.
In conclusion, people should take a job right away when they run into opportunity to get a secure job. Not only does it help not to miss it, but also get more experience quickly. We should not lose opportunity to obtain a good job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2153.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86004514673 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59236578409 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505643340858 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6850130537 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.12 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.72 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44118435901 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153096278168 0.076458572812 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109561208992 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329755941283 0.150856017488 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447068552029 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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