Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that the children do need to pay attention to financial problem. In contrast, there are those people who believe that the children must deal with the financial issue. I, to a great degree, agree with the second group. In my point of view, this action helps them be more responsible in the other affairs, improve their business thought and create some job in order to make money during childhood.
The first and foremost reason is that this practice makes children turn into a responsible person in different aspects. if he or she learn that the one is responsible in front of the money or allowance that the one takes from their parents, he starts to spend it effectively. With the passage of time, the one learn that he must keep up their money in the best way so that in the certain situations the one can use it. for example, if that person loses their money in the school, perhaps the one will has not got any money to get back home.
The second reason which must be taken into consideration is that this action helps children use their minds in this respect. he or she surveys the value of the materials and equipment in the home and in the school and when the one finds them valuable, that person automatically will understand that he or she make use them the best ways. therefore, this wisdom encourages them to think wisely around their surroundings and in the certain situations, he or she can suggest some proposal, financial proposal. For example, the son of family tells his father to buy a roomy car instead of another car.
Finally, the third reason is that the one tries to do something to make money. Of course, it is better to say that this practice is related to age ranges of above 15. take my new fried as an example. he says that when he was 14, he stared teaching English language for other institute and for this reason he was so happy and this helped him buy a car when he was 19. therefore, making money in the time of teenage can be useful.
In short, all the mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the children should start to tackle with money when they are a teenager.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, third, for example, in contrast, in short, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52941176471 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38888645079 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498721227621 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4609221169 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3888888889 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175384072073 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636461958887 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420312710222 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113906849084 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637564488552 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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