Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The fact that children have to learn how to manage their own money is some challenging issue. So many people believe that we don not have to put kids under pressure of managing money in young age but it is a really elegant way to teach them how the should control their financial situations. I think in order to become financial responsible adults, children should learn how to take control over their own money at young age for three reasons.
First of all, one of the best moment to learn the value of money to kids is in their young age. Otherwise they can turn into adults with understanding about their financial situations. For example, my cousin could spend how much he wanted in the past and as a result now he can be considerate about his financials situations and that only because in the young age he did not teach anything about the value and importance of money.
Secondly, when some kids learn how to control his/her financial situations in that age, it would be more likely to understand the concept of risk taking in their future. For instance, one of my friend in university took a huge risk in his 20's and that was only because the fact that he did not know anything about risk taking and the rout of that problem was in his childhood that he did not have any comprehension over his situations.
Third of all, you must have practice to manage your situations in simple way in order to be ready to take charge when the situations got complex and difficult. Therefore when you put some child in charge of his situation he/she is getting ready for serious and more complex conditions in the future. For example, my brother was in charge of all his financial condition and that was like a train to him in order to be much more ready . when he was 27 he could buy a house in Canada and that was honest achievement.
it was hard for him to deal with all problem but he could handle the situation really well and that was because of his past background on controlling his financial situations.
To sum up it would be great to teach children from young age to be more responsible for their financial situations in that case it is possible to be more considerate about their money in their future and help them to manage the situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, well, for example, for instance, i think, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50243902439 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48098599891 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407317073171 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6683866476 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.857142857 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2857142857 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224834957745 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106078437513 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0991029498347 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133205127843 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108260204541 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.1575268817 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.69 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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