Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel
that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.
The importance of human activities on the Earth is something important and it can be denied at all. Human activities could have both positive and negative effect on the Earth. In my point of view, the Earth is being harmed by human activity for two crucial reasons.
First, I think some of human activities is going to ruin the balance in the nature. For instance, when human being cut the trees to make a prepare sheets for book, magazine,... they demolish the jungles and therefore, the trees which are the most important resource of oxygen are going to ruin. I heard once that in America some people were criticized the harmful human activities and government make new rules to prevent them from doing these kind of activities. In the case that they don not obey the rule, they are going to punish really hard and they have to pay large amount of money as a penalty. You can see in this case both human being and the Earth are going to lose something. In one hand we are going to lose one of our vital substance that could led us live and on the other hand the Earth is going to change because of loss. In this situation, earth weather could change totally and that could not be positive things for people that are living in that specific area.
Secondly, nowadays because of industrial activities human are producing a lot of detrimental gasses that could be the main reason that we made some damage in the Ozone layer. For example, in this century because of the development of technology, the number of the industrial companies are increasing. Therefore the pollution that these manufacturing centers are producing is rapidly growing and that can have a harmful effect on the Ozone layer. I heard some chemical factory in Iran produced a huge amount of CFC gases and the people who around that area make a protest and tried to close that company. Finally they could close that company and the police arrested the head of that chemical company. It does not need to say that this issue is really serious because that damage annihilate Ozone layer forever and after that there is nothing that we can do for this problem. It would be so clear that in this case not only we affect this generation of people's life but also the next generations of people are going to suffer from this condition. So we could see that how much human activity could damage the Earth.
To sum up, although some people believe that human activity makes the Earth better place to live but in my opinion I think that human activities are the most important reasons that the Earth is going to be damage and if we do not stop the dangerous activities the Earth is going to damaged that is beyond repair.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 137, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... when human being cut the trees to make a prepare sheets for book, magazine,... they demo...
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Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...make a prepare sheets for book, magazine,... they demolish the jungles and therefo...
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Line 2, column 438, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ke new rules to prevent them from doing these kind of activities. In the case that they do...
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Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...he industrial companies are increasing. Therefore the pollution that these manufacturing ...
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Line 3, column 604, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...rotest and tried to close that company. Finally they could close that company and the p...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: GOING_TO_VBD[1]
Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'damage'
Suggestion: damage
...gerous activities the Earth is going to damaged that is beyond repair.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.0286738351 245% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57796257796 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34118897084 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438669438669 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.8245993947 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.1 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32366216953 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108745814021 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986094904744 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260095549991 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105199129598 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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