Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of education, children nowadays are exposed of numerous knowledge since a very young age. Recently, whether a kid should manage money in his/her childhood in order to nurture him/her to be responsible is under heated discussion. Personally, i disagree with the idea mainly because of the following reasons.
To begin with, children are likely to adopt bad habits instead of being responsible if they are allowed to hold a large quantities of money at a very young age. It is human's instinct to chase for extravagent objects and live a comfortable life. Without much education, a toddler may spend money on things which are not necessary, toys at a sky-high price, for example. Besides, they may even compete with others to spend more money out of jealousy. Take my cousin for example, he was given a comparatively large amount of money since he was at primary school. Instead of managing the money, he spent it on video games and indulged himself in virtual world. At last, he lost interest in studying instead of becoming responsible, which was adverse to his parents' expectation.
Secondly, a family may suffer from financial loss if its kids are granted a large sum of money because the society is so complicated nowadays. The last few decades has witnessed rapid development of financial markets. There are countless kinds of products such as bonds, stocks, options, derivatives, etc. emerging in front of customers. Even well-educated adults may fall into traps set by financial frauds, leaving alone juvenile teenagers. A recent news is an example to the point. It is reported that an adolescent who was going to be university student after the summer vacation was cheated out of tuition by a telephone call. Unfortunately, the victim was so ashamed that she committed a suicide. If she was never given the money, this tragedy could never have happened.
Last but not least, there are many alternative ways to bring up a child to be responsible adult, reading books, taking outdoor exercises or practicing an instrument for example. Taking myself for example, I become a responsible adult because my parents asked me to read many biographies since I was in kindergarten. Stories of Mary Curry, Elbert Einstein and Steve Hoking, etc. inspire me a lot. They not only teach me to be responsible for my own sake, but also carry the duty of the whole human-kind.
Taking all reasons above including addicted to bad habits, cause financial loss and alternative ways into consideration, I am strongly against the statement that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03669724771 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82431010128 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584862385321 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.0475580243 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.84 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.44 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240301642493 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548165530165 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653085513857 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149323842528 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0929196201197 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.