Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of society, citizens nowadays have more access to countless commodities than ever before. As a result, we tend to consume unnecessary commodities out of passion. Recently, a topic concerning whether most advertisements polish products to let them seem better is under heated discussion. Personally, I strongly agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First of all, companies in contemporary society always hire superstars to advertise for their products for more sale. It is reported that more than third of teenagers in China chase superstars and are willing to spend money on commodities related to them. Usually, the products are in poor quality but hire a celebrities to advertise for them. In that case, young adults are likely to behave insensible and waste a lot of money on it. My friend, Zoe is a good example to the point. Last year, her idol, Wan Qian, a famous Chinese actress, advertise for a brand. She watched it on the TV and found the T-shirts produced by this brand were so gorgeous on her idol and decided to order it. However, when the package was delivered to her, it turned out that the T-shirt which seemed nice had a whole on it and could not be returned. Such experience served as a life-long lesson for her and she determined not to buy anything just out of passion for a superstar.
Secondly, advertisements are the only channel for customers to feel many products since online shopping has become ubiquitous in China. Recent investigation reveals that cloth sales through websites have increased over twice in the past year and made up more than half of the market. As a result, owners of online shops exert themselves to seize every chance to advertise their products in a fabulous way. Once, I saw an interesting chair on Taobao, which is the largest online shopping platform in China. It claimed that the chair was so adapted to human body that users would feel nothing but comfortable sitting all day on it. Induced by this magic words, I bought one at a sky-high price and sent it to my mother as a present. Unfortunately, my mother later complained to me that it was just an ordinary chair, which caused her backache after a long sit on it.
Last but not least, more tools can be used to make unreal advertisement since the technology has advanced to an unprecedented stage. Software which can edit pictures are able to make images of product more appealing to patrons. Just take food advertisement for instance. Businessmen add yellow tone to videos of food on purpose in order to let them appear to be well-baked. What's more, they hire people to pretend customers waiting in line out side of their restaurant, which raise Hunger Effect for passers-by. In addition, red flags can be deleted and comments will be revised on recommend systems by products owner, which induces people to come by on their shops.
To sum up, taking all the reasons including celebrity effect, wide-spread of online shopping as well as advanced technology, into consideration, I am strongly for the claim that most advertisements make products look more captivate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a celebrity' or simply 'celebrities'?
Suggestion: a celebrity; celebrities
...e products are in poor quality but hire a celebrities to advertise for them. In that case, yo...
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Line 9, column 388, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a fabulous way" with adverb for "fabulous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...very chance to advertise their products in a fabulous way. Once, I saw an interesting chair on Ta...
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Line 13, column 375, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...er to let them appear to be well-baked. Whats more, they hire people to pretend custo...
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Line 13, column 441, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...le to pretend customers waiting in line out side of their restaurant, which raise Hunger...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, well, for instance, in addition, as a result, as well as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2601.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9168241966 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79523594819 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567107750473 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 821.7 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9328534681 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3333333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5925925926 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144198323852 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399887107529 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441010435641 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941068675136 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533140517931 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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