TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
selling and buying products is a momentous matter for producers and consumers simultaneously. quality and price are two important criteria for people and quantity of selling is a great concern for producers. some people believe that advertisement doesn't have any striking impact on them but personally I think that nobody is impervious to advertisement and we couldn't neglect the power of it in our lives. I will substantiate my notion in the following paragraphs.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that deceiving people is one the noticeable goal of advertisement. Companies and manufacturers design the television clip or the flyer or billboard in a way to highlight the advantages of their products and on the other hand they conceal the downsides of their goods. In order to shed lights to this matter I will explain one related passage that I have read recently. The article states that some advertisements create an imagination about the quality of their goods for their viewers even by saying that our products are more expensive but it is because of our two years warranty. As a result, this type of describing a product will be alluring for listeners. As you can see propaganda could be effective on people.
The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that repeating information for human being has an unavoidable influence on them. When advertisement which is related to a specific good is shown on television in a noticeable quantity, that brand will be engraved on our mind for a short-term or in some cases for a durable time. this impact is very momentous on children and kids. I am going to share one of my personal experiences about this subject. my nephew is seven. I saw him last week and something attractive drew my attention. He sang one the songs which was related to television clip of a specific toy . Thus advertisement is very influential on children.
In brief, I believe that we couldn't ignore the power of advertising on our life because not only advertisements are deceptive but also their impact is severe on our children and our kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Quality
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... some people believe that advertisement doesnt have any striking impact on them but pe...
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...y is impervious to advertisement and we couldnt neglect the power of it in our lives. I...
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...ragraphs. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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...product will be alluring for listeners. As you can see propaganda could be effecti...
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Suggestion:
...is severe on our children and our kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, thus, i think, in brief, as a result, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90909090909 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98215013337 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528925619835 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5631924275 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7894736842 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0817990080547 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0252145322555 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0179307963764 0.0737576698707 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510956546843 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134663820964 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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