TPO-22 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Educational matters are very important for parents. teachers should be aware of their statements in the classrooms more than anybody in a society because their speeches have a direct effect on students who will construct future of a society. Some people believe that teachers should not convey their personal notions in different subjects such as political or even social matters to pupils. I really confirm this thought and I will substantiate my opinion in the following paragraphs.
The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that, a forethoughtful teacher should be unbiased in political or social happening in the classroom because children are so sensitive and impressionable. students are prone to make inappropriate decisions which could be harmful for their future. In order to shed light on this matter I will bring a personal example. When I was in high school, I had a very spokesman history teacher. he expressed his political tendency in classroom for students and in one the presidency elections, he talked about one of the nominees and encouraged students to vote him. Most of my classmates could vote for the first time and they impressed by our teacher. As a result, majority of our class voted to that nominee. However, eight years after that happening we perceive that he had deceived us by unbiased advertisement.
The second reason behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that students are not experienced enough to discriminate among various political or social tendencies or ideas. Understanding between the wright and wrong strategies requires a vast information about current society, history and the possible future.
In brief, I should aver that teachers must be unbiased in classrooms and never utter they personal ideas about controversial matters because not only this partisan views lead to make incorrect decisions by the students but also theses teachers abuse mislead the students as well because of their lack of enough information.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Teachers
...matters are very important for parents. teachers should be aware of their statements in ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...aragraphs. The first thing coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Students
...en are so sensitive and impressionable. students are prone to make inappropriate decisio...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...I had a very spokesman history teacher. he expressed his political tendency in cla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, even so, in brief, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 324.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24074074074 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90197652714 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561728395062 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5019274124 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224811813227 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639685985028 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565028751237 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135184628954 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380140287132 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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