Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When thinking about the issue that nowadays it is more sophisticate to choose a job which would lead to a secure, successful future than it was in the past, varied individuals will have diverse ideas. Some citizens claim that thanks to the globalization more and more new careers and jobs surge, since we have limited understand about them, it is difficult for us to identify a satisfied job. However, from where I stand, currently we have far more accesses to identify a job wether is decent and secure because families tend to give us as much supports as possible and with the Internet we can easily have a deep insight into various type of job.
First and foremost, today the overwhelming majority of metropolis require a high living cost due to the fierce competition among society. In such a circumstance, family members are inclined to give their children plenty of constructive suggestions to assure them have a bright future. So with the experience and expertise from parents and relatives, it is not an obstacle for youngsters to find jobs which guarantee them a secure and successful future. Take my elder brother who now is an employee in a foreign enterprise as an example. My brother was quite confused on what job should he choose when he graduated from college and received two offer, one was from a state corporation and the other was from a foreign enterprise. Then his parents recommended him to choose the job from foreign enterprise for he can receive a decent salary and have more leisure time. Therefore, he deferred what his parents told him and now he is quite successful. The aid from families will enable young generation to make a correct decision.
Furthermore, thanks to the high development of network people currently can acquire substantial information and knowledge with just a tap of a finger. And the knowledge renders them to distinguish which job can give them a bright future. For instance, my friend Lisa attended several career fairs after graduation. And before the interview, she referred to many materials on Internet, and found a job suit her most, then she brought a detail curriculum vitae. Since she did a lot of preparation, she successfully got the job at last. In this way, youngsters are able to identify a vocation that fit them most with the help of network.
In a nutshell, not only do the aids from young generation's families enable them to make a better choice, but also the Internet gives them adequate information to distinguish various jobs. So I strongly dissent from the statement mentioned in the question.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...deas. Some citizens claim that thanks to the globalization more and more newly ca...
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Line 1, column 544, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ure because families tend to give us as much supports as possible and with the Inter...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...uture. Take my elder brother who now is a employee in a foreign enterprise as an ...
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Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'offer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'offers'.
Suggestion: offers
...graduated from college and received two offer, one was from a state corporation and t...
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Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this knowledge' or 'these knowledges'?
Suggestion: this knowledge; these knowledges
...wledge with just a tap of a finger. And these knowledge render them to distinguish which job ca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90366972477 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80861711646 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545871559633 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1412167688 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.526315789 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191874806945 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521153756196 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428822690839 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110471362473 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493997404949 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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